Reviews for The Second Journey by Smortz

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crin_fausta (Chapter 8) - Fri 11 Mar 2011

I can't believe that you doubted even for a second your talent! You should go to a doctor and check yourself, who knows what you are going to find out! *wink*

The way you outlined Kagome's fears when talking with the seer (very original by the way), not to mention Kagome's reaction to the forest where simply fantastic. I could feel every single emotion/feeling that Kagome experienced...and that, not many writers can do.

By the way..I forgot...Did I tell you how much I love the way you portrayed Kagome??? "To hell with dragon youkai, I claim the castle when they're gone, Kagome mused softly in her head. She could see a version of herself jumping with a green and white colored flag in front of the gate, waving it to fend off any competitors." You are a genius!

 

 


soulNchantress (Chapter 9) - Fri 11 Mar 2011

Yeah!!  Kagome rocks!!  Thanks so much for a second chapter!

I have so many questions about this story, but I would rather just wait and find out for myself if my guess are right. LOL

I was so suprised when I checked my mail and had an update alert for your story! :-)  YEAH!!

As always, wonderful job!


Ceysna (Chapter 8) - Thu 10 Mar 2011

I'm with Kags about taking over the Dragon's castle if they all bite the dust. Poor girl though... I HOPE SHE GETS THE HINT!!! *pulls on hair* she's smart this time, right? she should get the hint, right?! RIGHT!?!?!?! *shakes comp screen*O = O RIGHT!?!??!?!?!?!


jojo661538 (Chapter 8) - Thu 10 Mar 2011

wow that is so sad about the trees and everything else but it was a great chapter keep up the great work i hope to read more soon ^_^


jojo661538 (Chapter 8) - Thu 10 Mar 2011

wow that is so sad about the trees and everything else but it was a great chapter keep up the great work i hope to read more soon ^_^


jojo661538 (Chapter 7) - Thu 10 Mar 2011

hahaha cadaver wow keep up the great work i hope you update soon ^_^


lara (Chapter 8) - Thu 10 Mar 2011

this is a great story....what a bitter horrible old woman that seer seemed....it was like she was purposely unkind,mean even or cruel that .,seer ..I guess her manner of being so cruel & tactless is why she appears that way   she creepy & I can imagine most people wanting to yell at her or worse when they left her.......she left Kagome feeling hopeless, did she do it on purpose ??..that was so sad.......are things going to get better for Kagome?? I like that she's powerful & tough

I  can hardly wait to read more...I love this story & I can't wait to see what type of things are coming next & what changes are in store for Kagome....I want to read more.....


soulNchantress (Chapter 8) - Thu 10 Mar 2011

Wow! ANOTHER great chapter!  Where do you come up with this!  It's AMAZING!  Everytime you update it just makes me want to read more!  I'm looking forward to when you finish this story.  I can't wait to read it again and again from start to finish!

More please! :-)

P.S.:  Good luck on your Test!


Ceysna (Chapter 7) - Wed 09 Mar 2011

*snaps fingers* DARNIT!!!! I was hoping they'd help each other bath!! lol, oh well. Thanks for the update! Looking forward to the next one!


crin_fausta (Chapter 7) - Wed 09 Mar 2011

This story looks the VERY, VERY promising. The way you create the plot, the characters is breathtaking, something that after a lot time of reading and reading fanfiction...you no longer can find...The fanfiction is full with cliches and fluff that it gives you headaches. This story is a like water in the middle of the desert.

I really enjoy reading your story => I wouldn't mind at all if you post a new chapter... *wink*


lara (Chapter 7) - Wed 09 Mar 2011

this is getting better & better. funny as hell too. I'm dying to know since I didn't remember the old dragon telling Kagome that the egg chooses who can hold it so she must have sensed it from the egg shell piece she is wearing then I started to wonder if the reason for the curse was actually that the egg itself didn't approve of who was caring for it, if the egg was sentient & it wasn't happy then it would make perfect sense if it was being cared for over a long period of time by someone it didn't want to be near or felt it was being mistreated,or felt the people caring for it were not trustworthy,it may have felt it was in jeopardy. it just seems logical if the egg felt uncomfortable or unhappy & were unable to speak or communicate to the ones caring for it  or in charge of who cared for it that it didn't like where it was....if that went on for a prolonged period of time I could imagine any sentient being feeling hopeless & hopelessness could be disastrous for something like the Dragons Egg which is responsible for maintaining that a race of beings stay alive...then again the one Dragon in the beginning did say that the Kami's themselves felt that the dragons should no longer exist for some reason....I don't recall if we were told the reason

I can't wait for the next chapter


soulNchantress (Chapter 7) - Tue 08 Mar 2011

Oooooo, bath time!  You know that two's company and three's a crowd.  LOL  Great chapter, but why did she have to share the bath with Shippo, too.  I think the steam in the air was from more than just the hot water. *evil smirk*

LOVED IT!!!  I'll be, as always, waiting for the next update.


Fanfictioner (Chapter 6) - Tue 08 Mar 2011

R-ROFL! Did Kagome just say that? As always, good job!


soulNchantress (Chapter 6) - Tue 08 Mar 2011

LOL The tongue thing was funny!  This story is in my favs, so I read every time you update!  It really gives me my fix for a good read with every chapter, and always leaves me hungry for more.

Another great chapter.  I can't wait for the next one!


Anna (Chapter 6) - Tue 08 Mar 2011

hahahaha, classic Kagome, that last line was.


lara (Chapter 5) - Mon 07 Mar 2011

I like this ...I like that the dragon & Sessh (shippo too) feel that Kagome is the most powerful priestess they've ever encountered. I also like that both Sessh & the dragon find her scent better than just clean human or miko but find Kagome's scent intoxicating ,I only wish they would feel that her scent is no longer human as if it no longer carries the scent of decay as all humans have because their lives are so short (especially compared to a demon)it's like they carry the scent of decay from birth. Knowing Kagome is so far from her future time & family I'd really like her to live to see them again. When I think back to the original story I remember that Kagome was thought to only be a Miko as strong as Kikyo..but after Sessh killed Magatsuhi, the evil spirit within the Shikon Jewel it turned out that Magatsuhi was sealing Kagomes true innate spiritual powers & once he was killed the seal on Kagomes power was broken..which meant that Kagomes true innate power was staggering....it was tremendous compared to the fact that the power she'd been using along was basically nothing.....I'd always wondered if the 'jewel of 4 souls' that was said to be made up of courage,friendship,wisdom & love was not just born within Kagome but returned to merge within her once Sessh defeated the evil (I don't know if Kagome released Midoriko or if her soul combined with Kagome similar to reincarnation or something). I just felt that the Kami's/destiny/fate had more of a purpose for Kagome being born to contain all that power & hold the jewel...I think in the real story Kagomes mother had seen the symbol glowing in Kagome's chest at birth & it was a mark of the seal that Magatsuhi had placed.

I can't wait to see what happens next...I love the idea of a second journey....it makes me think of so many possibilities


aiko (Chapter 5) - Mon 07 Mar 2011

ahh.. i love the story so far... hope for more soon... thanks!!!!!!


KEdakumi (Chapter 5) - Mon 07 Mar 2011

Too cool.  I love how grown up and protective you are drawing Shippo.  I am throughly enjoying this story and can't wait to see where it's going.


jojo661538 (Chapter 4) - Mon 07 Mar 2011

wow i really like your story it fantastic keep up the great work i hope to read more soon ^_^


Anna (Chapter 4) - Sun 06 Mar 2011

Hehe,I see good times and many fun battles ahead. Can't wait ^_^


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