Reviews for The Second Journey by Smortz

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Nicole (Chapter 13) - Mon 24 Feb 2014

I like this more mature Shippo. He is reaching inside himself to stand up to beings stronger than he is and looking out for his Mama as best he can. 


Lojuba (Chapter 31) - Mon 09 Dec 2013

I read your Story in one go. Needless to say that I loved it. It got me absolutely hooked ;)

 


Pricila (Chapter 31) - Sat 12 Jan 2013

Wonderful story!!  Loved every moment of it, thank you for writing it!


Lisa (Chapter 31) - Tue 27 Nov 2012

Love the story.  Great job.


Angelika (Chapter 31) - Sat 13 Oct 2012

WOW i really really really like this story. when i first read the summary i wasn't sure. it was a good summary but i'm alwyas a little on edge lately when tyring ot find a good story to read. they start out awesome and end bad or start off horirbely and r expected to end good. either way i can't bring myself to finish them. but i started this one and barely wanted to stop reading. thanks for the awesome story. ill look into your others to see if there any that make my mind explode lol


LoveAndFaith (Chapter 31) - Sun 24 Jun 2012

I'm finally leaving a review after reading this story years ago, the story was great and I enjoyed it.


kimchi759 (Chapter 15) - Thu 14 Jun 2012
Yup...like in this chapter when he shudders in pleasure when Kagome (of all possible characters) growls. Sesshoumaru? Shuddering in pleasure? Mewling? Smiling? Kagome? Growling? If these changes are because of her sudden demonic attributes, it'd be nice to have that explained. And I would be squeeing in delight and grinning in a mentally incapacitated manner at these lovely moments of fluff if I knew where they were coming from. I keep getting the impression I missed the first half of this story or several chapter throughout the first 14 because I never saw the build up in emotions and the changes in character/bias. Plus, this is Sesshoumaru's house. Why are the servants/other demons so accepting of Kagome? Meh. Maybe I'm completely wrong but this is just how I see it. My (unwanted?) critique. Still loving the creativity. C:

kimchi759 (Chapter 14) - Thu 14 Jun 2012
It's a very creative story with a great premise but the execution could be better. There are typos and grammar mistakes that could've been easily avoided. That and despite the appreciation I have for your originality, Kagome and Sesshoumaru are veering into OC territory with their uncharacteristics thoughts and actions. It feels like he is much more emotive and easily surprised than he should be, and Kagome, even considering the three year time jump, is a lot more...erm, aggressive? Callous? Sesshoumaru-like? In certain scenes/passages, I feel like switching the names would fit more. But this is all just my opinion. Like I said, it's still a very creative story. Plus, I'm often irritated because fanfics can portray Kagome as a shrinking, demure violet-and you obviously did not. Kudos for that too! :)

Ditto Princess (Chapter 31) - Tue 03 Apr 2012

I LOVE THIS STORY!!! YOU HAVE DONE A FANTASTIC JOB ON IT AND I HAVE ENJOYED READING THIS!!! 

ON TO ANOTHER ONE!!!

~_~^-^~_~ - Ditto Princess


Ditto Princess (Chapter 30) - Tue 03 Apr 2012

Lmfao!!!! Funny as hell!!! Never thought that something like that would happen lol!!!

Amazingly funny and awesome!!!

~_~^-^~_~ - Ditto Princess


Ditto Princess (Chapter 29) - Tue 03 Apr 2012

Cutest thing on this whole freaking earth!!!

Just the freaking cutest!!!

~_~^-^~_~ - Ditto Princess


Ditto Princess (Chapter 28) - Tue 03 Apr 2012

That's what I'm talking about... Always with a laugh lol :)

~_~^-^~_~ - Ditto Princess


Ditto Princess (Chapter 27) - Tue 03 Apr 2012

Thats what Im talking about!!! Get it Sesshomaru!!!

~_~^-^~_~ - Ditto Princess


Ditto Princess (Chapter 26) - Mon 02 Apr 2012

Lights, Camera, Action!!!

~_~^-^~_~ - Ditto Princess


Ditto Princess (Chapter 25) - Mon 02 Apr 2012

Lmao, rub it for him, to make it feel better!!!

:)

~_~^-^~_~ - Ditto Princess


Ditto Princess (Chapter 24) - Mon 02 Apr 2012

I love how everything gets so light between the two at the end of a chapter... There so cute lol...

:)

~_~^-^~_~ - Ditto Princess

 


Ditto Princess (Chapter 23) - Mon 02 Apr 2012

Lmao, She's goofy even when she's passed out lol!!!

~_~^-^~_~ - Ditto Princess


Ditto Princess (Chapter 22) - Mon 02 Apr 2012

iLOVE this but it's like 5 and I need sleep... untilll next time :)

~_~^-^~_~ - Ditto Princess


Ditto Princess (Chapter 21) - Mon 02 Apr 2012

HELL F YEAH!!! WOO AWAY SESSHOMARU LMAO IDK ABOUT KAGOME, BUT I LOVE THE WAY THIS IS ALL PLAYING OUT LOL

;)

~_~^-^~_~ - Ditto Princess


Ditto Princess (Chapter 20) - Mon 02 Apr 2012

I Love It When Sesshomaru Talks Bad lol

:)

~_~^-^~_~ - Ditto Princess


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