Im so glad you updated!!!! That was a great chapter and shippo's back, Yay!!! I cant wait to see what happens when they all meet up!
This story is so well-conceived and well written; I find I have little left to add save for unabashed gushing praise. Usually I try to give some kind of constructive criticism, but really, in this case I find myself simply sitting back and enjoying the ride. Despite negative occurrences happening to the main characters (as explained in Tortuga), these events only serve to highlight the depth of the characters (and your writing skills). I like that Gisela demonstrates a degree of empathy for Kagome here by providing womanly comforts...we begin to see her (Gisela) as more than simply a potential rival for Sesshoumaru's attentions.
Kagome's current hatred for Sesshoumaru is so perfect here - she knows she is hurting because of it (her hatred), yet she can't help but feel that way toward her erstwhile protector, given his failure to protect her. It's painful to see, but it is also realistic given what's she's gone through. Although Roger Vane was the direct physical cause of her pain, how can she not associate that pain with Sesshoumaru's failure to aid her in her time of need? At the same time, although Kagome's pain/hatred is the cause of this, it is also really wonderful to see that she has asserted her independence from Sesshoumaru. He cannot fully accept her as an individual with value (and perhaps she cannot fully accept herself that way) while she is constantly relying on him. Thus, while I don't relish the idea of Kagome in anguish, I do love the fact that she has insisted on remaining separated from him for the time being. And I LOVE the note she left him. It's so succinct, and the fact that it's not signed...so perfectly conveys how she feels, her ambivalence toward him.
As for Sesshoumaru's "revenge" taken on the pirate (and his crew)...in my view, it is really revenge for the harm to Sesshoumaru's pride (that he was unable to protect Kagome) and/or for his shame (that he sent her away, and thus exposed her to such harms), rather than revenge for the actual harm done to Kagome herself. Sesshoumaru still has yet to fully accept Kagome's importance to him as more than a fellow immortal bound by the wish. (Kagome recognizes this as well, as demonstrated by the note, in which she points out that his honor is at stake). I imagine that this is at least part of why you felt inclusion of this chapter was so crucial, as a step toward getting Sesshoumaru to accept Kagome as something more.
I suppose I could go on and on, but suffice to say this chapter, in keeping with the rest of the story, is lovely in its perfection. I hope you have a lot more planned for us, for I will be quite at a loss when this story ends...
| Wow, so horrificly moving. With as much history we were taught in school and the movies we watched about pirates, the fasination to read about them proved to be intriguing. I quickly lost my fancy for them as I descided to read more than just the "fun" stuff and couldn't believe all the actual horror. You did one excellent job with this chapter and though it put Kagome in a situation, I am glad that you gave Sesshoumaru the choice to avenge Kagome's honor not by just a quick death but that the main deviant was given all that he deserved by the slow torturous death he received, If only some kind of message could have been left behind to leave all aware as to why this pirate lost his life. None the less, Kagome knows of this and hopefully she can come around to forgiving Sesshoumaru for not thinking that she was still just a human woman that he left go on her own without protection of any means and this goes for Sesshoumaru,too, as I know that just killing that pirate isn't going to be enough justification for his misjudgement. Great job. JEN
| Damn that WAS heavy!!! I actually think I cried a little bit...well, like one tear. That's pretty intense for me though (not much of a crier). Anyway even though the subject matter was a little disturbing I can see how it was vital to the story, and I absolutely can't wait for your next chapter!!!
What can I say? Another awesome chapter. I enjoy the change in locales, every chapter is a little slice of history. What happened to Kagome changed Sesshomaru just as much or more than it did Kagome. His feelings are starting to show.
Enjoyed the historical authenticity of this piece. One gets to see how Kagome has suffered and how she wreaks vengeance on those who have injured her. Hopefully, she will forgive Sesshoumaru next time they meet.
BTW I assume you meant to say "Tenseiga" instead of "Tetsusaiga" since IY would never willingly give up Tetsusaiga and it would never accept Sesshoumaru.
| Wow That was a really good chapter but Kind of dark!
anna (Chapter 9) - Fri 27 Mar 2009
| Oh...that was so tragically terrible and sad, I almost cried. I hope that this story does become lighter, but your writing is wonderful as always.
kedala (Chapter 9) - Fri 27 Mar 2009
Oh my....
What a beautifully sad chapter. My heart goes out to Kagome. What a horrible thing to have happened.
But thank you for writing it nonetheless.
I always look forward to reading this story, to being drawn in to this world.
Although their time together was short, and somewhat heartbreaking, I know the both are anxious to meet again. Just as I am anxious to read the next installment.
Lauren (Chapter 8) - Sat 07 Mar 2009
| This story is amazing!!! Please update soon!
Ashes (Chapter 8) - Mon 02 Mar 2009
Wonderfully written. I enjoyed it very much. Although, I am rather sad that Kagome and Sesshoumaru are split up now. I'm fascinated to see where you take this.
| After 142 years together, they finally separate? Saddening. I really enjoy the intensity of your chapters and how after reading them, I either feel like bashing my head through a wall or jumping up and down with glee. Relief at the death of one of those blasted monkeys!
| Ohh, a very good idea for a story, and one that me likey very muchy. I'm looking forward with baited breath for your next chapter of "much suffering".
*evil laugh*
kedala (Chapter 8) - Mon 02 Mar 2009
| Yes, yes, yes, you will hear my cry of dismay! OMG...that was...that was just too freaking emotional. I don't know what I'm feeling. I have goosebumps. Another great addition. Now all I can say is that making us wait longer than a week for the next installment would be torture, cruel and unusual; and that the only method I know in getting my way is to hold my breath like a five year old throwing a tantrum for a new shiny toy. I don't want to resort to these tactics but dammit I will if I have too!!!
anna (Chapter 8) - Mon 02 Mar 2009
| Oh, that was so sad.Once again, you've written beautifully and have captured both characters perfectly. I don't think I've ever read a story where everyone is so in character but you can still have a romance. Looking forward to what happens next.
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