Its naughty and so good

That awesome moment when you are listening to Pandora while reading fan fiction want the song and and song happen to be related XD 

type o negative is my favorite band of all time. the song you chose is perfect, you did a beautiful job. you forever have my undying respect for this. <3

Loved it... I also checked out the song and the band, but I didn't like it... however, the lyrics blend perfectly in your story and that is what i liked--the wantonness;)

Excellent! Dark, but not too dark, just enough.

this was a great chapter. I really enjoyed it. 

Love It..... Love It......Love it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

good job...I liked this...it was well done...

wow i like it ive never tried to read one like this but i tell u what its amazing keep it coming 

This was a fantastic first attempt - very well thought out and ignoring certain aspects, I thought it flowed wonderfully.  It just needs some TLC for grammar and punctuation.

You could really benefit from the assistance of a Beta - and I mean this in the most positive of ways.

It's a good story for your first post...keep the creative juices fLowing.