That fu**ing bitch naraku. . Update soon by the way
CC for your rape scene: Well, it felt very rushed. Where is the fighting, the descriptions? All I saw were some rather long paragraphs that bored me. Descibe it, make us feel pity for the heroine, make the reader wish death upon Naraku. That was just, meh. She got raped.
As for the rest of the chapter. Just kinda meh in general. Felt like it was thrown together shortly, didn't progress things besides the point that she was raped.
Still wondering where this will go though.
Great chapter, keep it coming.
Keep it coming.
so no rape scenes? XD
Keep it coming.
Well, a good little introspection piece for Sesshomaru. That wasn't too much that raised any eyebrows, just kind of an explanation to what's going on. Only thing that really caught my attention was the whole she was his/destiny has destined her for me aspect. Love that angle.
Anyways, enjoyed it and hope to see more.
Much better. The ending of this edit feels much more satisfying and the errors aren't there.
- Rin-Rin, Kami of Dogs
I liked it, though it felt short and cut off at a needless point. You can have more than one scene per chapter, okay? I saw mistakes as well, one on the very first line acutally but they didn't distract to badly. A quick read through would probably sweep them under the rug.
Anyways, I like the concept and I'm intrigued to see where you head with this one.
- Rin-Rin, Kami of Dogs
I had put a smiley face but it came up as question marks... So ignore those!
Very good! I can't wait to read more!! ????
This story sounds interesting, keep it coming.
This definately had me intruiged. I look forward to reading more! I feel so bad for Kagome. Can't wait for "Prince Charming". :) Thanks for taking the time to do my challenge!
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