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R (Chapter 1) - Sun 14 Oct 2018

Apologies! The review I just left was for another story - oh dear lord - I’m not sure how that happened. Trust that I will review your lovely story when o complete it! <3


R (Chapter 1) - Sun 14 Oct 2018

Whew... * thunderous applause * ... you are one of the writers on this site who set the bar ridiculously high for all other stories. This story was so savory. You are a phenomenal writer (clearly), but your dedication to beautiful detail, willingness to write with depth without superfluous content takes your work to a different level than most. I really loved your characterizations - Sessh / frustratingly aloof, cold as nails, but longing in his heart - sigh - so good. It was also great to have a Kagome who wasn’t acting like a halfwit, which always feels like such a disservice to women when written as such.  The angst was delicious - just right without being overdone. Simple + elegant - thank you! I truly hope you find continued inspiration to keep this trilogy going. 


Lotusthorn (Chapter 70) - Tue 28 Aug 2018

Hello! I just want to say I followed you all the way over from FF and I have loved your stories. I feel like you are a wonderful writer and your stories get me through my day. It is rare that I am able to completely immerse myself in a writer through so many different stories, and you have made it possible for me! Thank you for being awesome! You deserve all of those awards!


Johna Giles (Chapter 70) - Wed 08 Nov 2017

This is probably my favorite fanfictions that I have ever read! I usually only read completed ones, so I remember accidentally reading this back when you were only up to the part when Kagome went to see Kanna in prison. I'm really glad that I happened to see it on the completed list. This story is phenomenal. I will be checking your profile for more of your stories!!


Dlat (Chapter 28) - Sun 16 Jul 2017

Hey, I'm still reading and loving the story thus far, but I wanted to point out a pretty serious typo in this chapter in regards to the flight plan. You stated that they would get to the Tokyo airport at 2pm and arrive in Las Vegas by 2:30. While I haven't traveled from Tokyo to the States, I know that a flight from Los Angeles to Hong Kong is 14 hours one way and 12 the other (depends on if you're traveling with the Earth or against it), or at least that was the time frame when I went to China in college. I wasn't sure if you meant their flight was leaving at 2:30 maybe? But I wanted to let you know.

Also, a couple other minor things I noticed earlier were in regards to the hospital. Typically they do not let anyone near someone who's been in surgery to prevent infection so while I understand why you did it, I doubt any doctor would let anyone let alone several people back to see someone who's just come out of surgery given that they wouldn't want to risk some type of bacteria being on their clothing or something of the like. Also, when an IV is placed, they do not leave the needle in your skin. Typically the needle is only used to insert the tubing for the iv and then the needle is removed.

I also wanted to let you know that due to the style in which you've chosen to write this, sometimes it is difficult to discern who is speaking or thinking or who you're referring to in general. There have been several instances where you switch perspectives from one mind to another and don't specify that you're doing it. This is especially confusing when refering to two characters of the same gender, say Inuyasha and Sesshoumaru, or Sango and Kagome. It's kind of jarring and sometimes takes a minute to figure out who is speaking or to whom or what they ar referring. You also tend to use pronouns without giving them distinguishing things to separate them. For example, if your scene has Inuyasha, Sesshoumaru, Touga, and Kagome in it, it's really confusing for you to just say "he" over and over since I have no clue which Taisho you are referring to. It's frustrating to have to guess which one you're referring to and it breaks up the flow of the story if I have to search for context clues in order to figure it out.

Anyway, please don't take all this the wrong way! I am loving the story up to this point, it's just as a Creative Writing major, I sorta can't help but notice these things and when I do, I feel I have to mention them as that is the only way to improve. I personally hate when I ask people to read things I've written (especially those I plan to submit to competitions which I'm slowly starting to try) to help me find the errors and all I get back are "Great story! I want more!" I really like the way you are building up the storyline and the characters themselves. Your pacing and tension is building up well. I was so worried Bankotsu was going to say Naraku had bought her debt whenever he visited her in the hospital. It was a nice build up and release on the tension.

Well, I'm going back to the story now! I can't wait to see if she's actually allowed on the plane (I'm personally hoping someone talks her out of it. 14 hours is a long time to wait for a landing if something goes wrong and it's not like they have lots of landing options).


Kanda (Chapter 60) - Mon 13 Mar 2017

midoriko??? was that intentional? or did you mean hitomiko?


Kanda (Chapter 54) - Mon 13 Mar 2017

you had me thinking, "what is this, final destination!?" jfc, stop scaring people! Dx


Kanda (Chapter 38) - Mon 13 Mar 2017

it don't matter where it came from. all i thought when she did that was, "damn, bitch, YAS!!"


candace peaches (Chapter 70) - Sat 12 Nov 2016

Loved it! C'ya'????


Koree (Chapter 70) - Thu 10 Nov 2016

Awwwww this story was AMAZING !!!! Defimitely a all time fave & Defonitely in my top Dokuga stories sad to see it end but it was a awesome ride


Loveyaa (Chapter 70) - Sun 06 Nov 2016

I can't believe its finally over!! What a trip. I love happy endings. Thanks for all the hard work you put into this amazing story. I hope you enjoy the afterglow a little bit before getting back to it and creating another story for us to enjoy :)


Ankita (Chapter 70) - Thu 03 Nov 2016
It was beautiful I m so happy loved all the snippets although I m sad it has ended but it was a super duperrrrr happy happy ultra happy ending <3 thankeww for writing such an awesome piece

Tana_san (Chapter 70) - Wed 02 Nov 2016

You did more than try your best, this fic was totally awesome!!! It was truly an epic for the ages. You hit all the right emotional triggers that kept me holding on through hours as I just couldn't put this down until I finished.

I love the family/pack bonds you created mixing human and youkai throughout that mimicked all the same racial predudices we face today and proving that race/species doesn't  matter when there's love and respect. They created new lives that will grow and hopefully close the predudice in the world. All the real life troubles we live through now were so true and open throughout the story and I found myself so endeared to these characters. The friendships to the evil,calculating hate mongers, the careless regard of women who work jobs they don't want to but need to for their own personal reasons, human trafficking...just every aspect you touched upon and still weaved a beautiful love story...truly amazing.

I absolutely love the epilogue! I am a big fan of knowing how the lives of everyone turned out and this was so wonderful!!! I thought for a moment there that Kichirou wouldn't mate Yume because of what happened in his parents and Kouga's past but then you had Kagome go to him and encourage him to look beyond it all and just think of Yume, the girl he innocently met and befriended only to grow up, fall in love with her, breakup and then find her again and this time find his mate. The whole family clapping at their window for the two was the cherry on the top for me. I love when family loves unconditionally and stays close even though their lives become too busy to always call. When that one important call comes the whole family shares in the good or the bad...unconditionally loving...

The end having Sessh and Kagome standing back and looking over their family and seeing how good their live has been...the perfect end. Thank you so much for gifting us with this story and never giving up to finish even when it got tough through RL and writer's block.

This was a great ride!

JEN


Deana (Chapter 70) - Wed 02 Nov 2016

I'm so glad that you really went all out to truly complete this story. I'm gladwe finally got see all the kids grown up with kids of their own.


Kira (Chapter 70) - Wed 02 Nov 2016

I'm horrible at  reviewing stuff but I want to say this story has been amazing. it has made me yell, get mad  and laugh. sad that it is over but so happy with the ending. wonderful job!


KeikoTakataxx12 (Chapter 70) - Wed 02 Nov 2016

Im so sad its over..... ive been here since chapter 39 

 

I was hooked to the concept, it intrigued me. now Ima have to reread it again. 


mani16koinu (Chapter 70) - Wed 02 Nov 2016

It's over! aww man this story has been a great time. I'm so glad you decided to do the epilogue. it was a good blend of little slices of life and plot wrap ups. I enjoyed it a lot!


Eva (Chapter 70) - Wed 02 Nov 2016

This was absolutely lovely. Kichiro and Yume were just the healing they needed. Thanks so much for sharing your talents with us.


Loveyaa (Chapter 69) - Tue 11 Oct 2016

What the end...wahhhh! I can't believe we've reached the end. Though I guess we have reached our happily every after. I do like that you have shown a more realistic view of bringing home a baby. I can't wait to see what happens next :)


Koree (Chapter 69) - Wed 21 Sep 2016

AWWWWWWWWW HOW CUTE !!! I cracked up at Sessh saying " we are going home " lol amazing chap :)


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