I love the concept, even the pacing though a little rushed (I'm guilty of this too). It really needed a beta for the grammar and a couple weird spots with dialog. It just feels like it should have had more to it. Almost like it was rushed out and large portions were skipped without reason. Time skips are fine but there were a couple moments that just felt weird. Either way it is still a good story.
aww that was an excellent ending. I enjoyed reading it. thanks.
I was just reading chapter 11chapter10 and am a little confused. when did Inuyasha catch up with Kagome, Sess, and Shippou? how did he convince them to let him and the others but specifically him stay with them? Last I knew Kagome wanted to kill him and they left before the others could catch up? Did you cut something important out when you were editing? Or was it just a time jump? enjoying this so far but I wanted to drop this so you could see if there was something wrong there. So far I am enjoying the story but I hope Kagome won't be quite so I wanna kill people so much. though I get that she has to find a balance with her new self and her old one. Looking forward to more.
The story was amazing and it had a wonderful ending.
Well done!!!! It is AMAZING!!!!
-TheNight-
(tear, tear) that was amazing!!!
Darkness within
-TheNight-
You should work on both Darkness Within and Not really yours, Keep it coming.
Keep it coming.
That was great!!!! Update soon please. Amazing!!
-TheNight-
Intresting. Intresting. You have done well !!
-TheNight-
Keep it coming.
I like this story very unique. I like the vampy twist to it. :) Can't wait for the next chapter! <3 <3
Intersting. Very very very intersting. Amazing!!!! Keep it up.
-TheNight-
The lemon was HOT!!! Keep it coming.
Awesome chapter!!
The lookpin Sesshomaru face when faia left was priceless. Can't wait for the chapter to pop up :3
........ Amazing!!!!! That is truely good. Keep it up.
-TheNight-
Keep it coming.
That was great!!!!
-TheNight-
Keep it coming.
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