Interesting story. It had me reading to the end even through the spelling mistakes and clumsy settings. Some parts were a little too obviously lifted whole from the Resident Evil movies. I did enjoy the bit of a twist at the end. Employing spell check (included free with most, if not all, word processing programs) and paying a little more attention to developing scenes would make you a very good writer.
(Chapter 9) - Fri 25 Nov 2011
this was a good read! ive never read any inuyasha story like it!
junko (Chapter 9) - Tue 22 Nov 2011
(Chapter 9) - Sun 06 Nov 2011
Hmmmmm.... hhhhmmmmmmmmm. *frowny face* HHHHMMMMMMMMMMMM... I'm really not sure.
Everything happened a little too fast for my taste and well... I'm actually kinda dissappointed. Sorry I don't like giving negative feed back if I can help it.
You did however inspire me for NaNoWriMo and a fiction story I was writing for fun. So Yay!
(Chapter 7) - Sun 06 Nov 2011
I like the story.
The formats kind of hard to follow, and I thought there'd be a little more 'horrificness' to it. But this is also coming from some one who grew up with a dad who worked the ICU and ER and told stories of disembowlment over our spaghetti dinner so don't take the last part of my critique too hard.
You made me giggle with the 'Amen Christian people' bit. I think you have Inuyasha pegged in his current environment/job.
(Chapter 7) - Sun 30 Oct 2011
i love how inu randomly has a cookie
AnonymousReader (Chapter 7) - Fri 28 Oct 2011
The grammatical errors and tense switching in this story are really distracting but the plot is so fresh that I'm still straining myself to read it. I don't know what to think.
Really great idea but work on your execution a little bit.
(Chapter 7) - Fri 28 Oct 2011
i wonder how he plans on getting souta and her out of there, and what kind of father can do tests like that on their children, just sad. well till next time,
(Chapter 6) - Thu 27 Oct 2011
hmmm he denied the panties comment but not the love bug one, waggles brow suggestively lol update soon and till then,
(Chapter 5) - Tue 25 Oct 2011
Niice this is my first zombie fic with sess/kags pairing. This is going to be goood! Good job! Can't wait for more!
I hope Souta doesn't get hurt. Siigh I don't know why he would open the door! I hope Kagome and Sesshomaru get there fast enought o save poor lil souta!
*I wonder what kind of zombie these are...are the like dawn of the dead zombies? with them running after you. Or are they like the walking dead zombies where they just walk after you?*
(Chapter 5) - Mon 24 Oct 2011
i am very displeased, now i have to worry about poor little souta, why would he open the closet door, i mean really, gosh!!!!~!!!!!!! lol till next time,
p.s. update soon, please end happily too because i might cry... yea i know sad reason for you to make this a happy ending but hey, the reader gets what the reader wants... somehow.... anyways update!!!!! UPDATE!!!!! UPDATE!!!!UPDATE!!!!!UPDATE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
(Chapter 4) - Mon 24 Oct 2011
good start, and not something we usually see in sess/kag. id like to offer some advice. when writing, a new person speaking always starts another paragraph. it gets confusing when you see two people holding a conversation in one wall of text.
ooooo! love it, totally had me thinking of L4D and that game always scares the crap out of me lol
Sesshoumaru and gang were thrown in on a suicide mission?! Oh no! lol
I wish to know what is going on update soon! today again would be lovely!
(Chapter 1) - Sun 16 Oct 2011
Has some potential, thou im not to found of AU stories.
You really should fix the "Universe" flag to Alternate since its definately not Canon btw
Page 1 of 2