| I like the story, but it does look like you need to work on your grammar and punctuation.  Maybe even sentence structure.  However, the story itself is very good.  ^^    
 
Rosalind (Chapter 1) - Sun 13 Feb 2011 | very cool, i like how kagome interacted with ebisu and overall this was a nice shot, looking forward to the run ins with the others    
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