Fluffy's Lady- Wed 09 Apr 2008
aww...sweet. she restored his arm and healed his wounds. that's sweet and done in a non-cliche way. very good. i like!!

FL

Mutnodjmet- Wed 09 Apr 2008
An enjoyable read. Please update soon. I would love to see where this journey takes us.

Nice work! *hugs and smiles*

Fluffy's Lady- Sun 06 Apr 2008
VERY interesting..i really want to know what all is going on. update soon plz!!

FL

Arsenic- Thu 03 Apr 2008
Awesome!! Go Miroku, Sango, and Shippo! I almost feel sorry for Inuyasha, but he deserver it...I hope you get a chance to update again soon!

smachit- Thu 03 Apr 2008
This is really good! My interest was immediately caught by your very original opening chapter. THe elemental was very cool. Looking forward to the next chapter!

Mutnodjmet- Thu 03 Apr 2008
Hmm, I find this story very interesting thus far. Looking forward to explanations of the changes amongst the group and the parts these new characters play. I found Owagousai to be very weird and want to know how he fits in. He's very talkative is he not? (just kidding) *giggles*

Future updates I'm sure will be very intriguing and entertaining.

*hugs and smiles*

Krystina- Tue 01 Apr 2008
Wonderful story so far~.

I think you're portraying everyone very well, its nice to see an older side to Rin and a more assertive Kagome.

Can't wait for the next chapter.

3

Jackthekipper- Tue 01 Apr 2008
I am impressed so far, especially with what I've seen so far of your characterization of Rin. My only thought is this--

I think you're being a -little- harsh on Inuyasha. I'm not really a fan of his, but I think that's quite out of character for even him. I personally think that they would quite easily slide back into their bickering, snide, snarking ways of cuteness that we see in the first few books once they realized they could not be romantically involved with each other. I highly doubt that even if this scenario did occur, that Inubaka would forgive himself easily. He'd be more the type to carry the guilt to the grave (as we've seen before). But, this is just my thoughts.

As I've said before, I'm just a lurker with good intentions, so I hope you don't take offense at my well meaning ramble. Until later!

--Jackie

serena- Tue 01 Apr 2008
the first 2 chapters are the same. I like it so far please update soon... when does sesshomaru show up?

Kari Konoko- Sun 30 Mar 2008
looking good ^^ olo....i told u so...but i laugh its fun to read ppls reveiws....i cant wait until the rest of the plot starts to unfold then they'll be really intersting

kotainuchan- Sun 30 Mar 2008
ooooOOOOoooo me likie so far! You seem to have a very original plot started. I must admit I'll have to get used to the honorifics, but I see where you're coming from. Please, new chapter soon k.

Gothic Lust- Sun 30 Mar 2008
I like it so far. It's proves to be an entertaining read. Update soon, and please notify me when you do. I wouldn't want to miss anything.

--Gothic Lust

Fluffy's Lady- Fri 28 Mar 2008
interesting. i like it so far. keep on.

FL

Rio Anfyr- Fri 28 Mar 2008
Actually Senpai is an honorific towards an elder with high respect (such as Owagousai would be to Sesshoumaru or Sesshoumaru is to Jaken) while sensei is that of a mentor (you'll find out how this is relevent to Rin later on) and sama is to show respect to one of greater power or rank, regardless of age. But it is all correct. That line you mentioned is my bad, and I was planning on editing it
a bit anyway before I continued. Also, he was speaking to Owagousai, who revealed 'Shikon' to be a mispronouciation. Therefore, while talking to Owagousai, Sesshoumaru used Shikouin (when he talked to Rin and Jaken he said Shikon because that is what they knew it as).

Thank you for your feedback and
criticism, though, it is good to have someone looking rom the outside in, rather than the inside out.

And Stacy, for the record, there is a BIT of the typical Inuyasha mistreating Kagome, leads to Kagome being willing to go with Sesshoumaru to save the world. However, it leads into the much LARGER aspect of the story.

I will update the story once it is edited. Please keep up the reviews ^^

~ Rio Anfyr ~

sallyo129- Fri 28 Mar 2008
I cannot agree with certain aspects of reviews I've read for this story. Your plot seems to be bursting with originality, and as someone who craves a storyline other than "Inuyasha chooses Kikyo, Kagome flees, somehow Sesshoumaru and Kagome become life-mates" your story is perfect. Your writing has a simple yet very mature and descriptive tone that some authors can't quite grasp, and so far, I haven't found anything that didn't quite make sense. You clearly distiguished between the different names of the Shikon and stated a breif but sufficently explanitory reason as to why. I think you have started in the right direction and should definetly proceed with this title. Happy writing!

Stacy- Fri 28 Mar 2008
I cannot agree with certain aspects of reviews I've read for this story. Your plot seems to be bursting with originality, and as someone who craves a storyline other than "Inuyasha chooses Kikyo, Kagome flees, somehow Sesshoumaru and Kagome become life-mates" your story is perfect. Your writing has a simple yet very mature and descriptive tone that some authors can't quite grasp, and so far, I haven't found anything that didn't quite make sense. You clearly distiguished between the different names of the Shikon and stated a breif but sufficently explanitory reason as to why. I think you have started in the right direction and should definetly proceed with this title. Happy writing!

EvanescentLight- Fri 28 Mar 2008
I love this story, but you've got a few things wrong in here. Somewhere when Sesshomaru was talking, he said: "Shikouin", instead of "Shikon". Then when he summoned out Owagousai, you put:

"Sessoumaru weaved power into his words not with volume, but with power."

Senpai and Sensei are like referring to a mentor of sorts, so I don't understand why Rin adds those honorifics. Shouldn't it be 'sama'?

I'm not trying to criticize your story, I think you've got a great idea going here, and with a little bit of work it would be awesome.

Continue please?

kyuthe- Fri 28 Mar 2008
Please do continue. I very much am intrigued by the plotline you've suggested.

I have good feelings about this fic. I'm not sure if they're founded, but a little faith never hurt.

Thanks for sharing,
I look forward to future entertainment.
Kyuthe

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