really nice fic dude! i really loved it
hope u will post a new chap soon.

since a single spark is closing will u be posting ur fic on dokuga or somewhere else?

dude, i heard that ss has to close down- you gotta post the fic on another site man!! please!
alot of the others are posting here http://www.dokuga.com/
maybe you can to?

I just wanted to let you know I love your story! It is a 10 in my book and I hope you update soon :)

I just wanted to let you know I love your story! It is a 10 in my book and I hope you update soon :)

I'm getting irritated with Kagome's continued ignorance of youkai behavior and mindset. You'd think as long as she's been in the past and around youkai, she'd have picked up some knowledge of their culture by now. If nothing else, she could have learned from Sango with her knowledge as a demon slayer. She's not even making an effort to try to understand what's taking place around her! She's human yes, but right now she's in a demons world. She needs to get her head out of her butt! Sesshoumaru has somewhat of an excuse for not understanding how humans think, because he does not interact with them unless he has to on a rare basis. So he expects her to think and behave like a demoness and gets confused when she doesn't. He's not letting himself stop and think that she's human and could be ignorant of many things youkai. The lack of communication between them is frustrating.

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i love you...

this story is so freackin interesting!

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thank you very , very much for the 20 page update !!!!!!!!!!!!

please update again soon !!!!!!!!!!

That was a truly awesome chapter! The writing style was very well executed. Poor Kagome. I hope she gets her chance to at least literally knock some sense into one of these males after her! She deserves to pummel someone after everything she's been through. I'm greatly looking forward to reading the next chapter! Take the time you need to make the next chapter just as great - I feel it was worth the wait ^_^

I love this story so much! It's just so wonderful how you are able to keep Sesshoumaru and Kagome in character! Koga's just like I'd expect him to be, and the new characters you are introducing are refreshing and entertaining! Thank you so much for all the hard work you've put into this story, and I hope you update soon!

I enjoy this story... but I have a few questions. First... in chapter nine i think it was... Kagome was going through a "list" of things she had not yet experienced.... and being beaten was one of them... when in fact prior to that she had been not only manhandled to the point of bruising, but also beaten rather badly--and action that most people would be permanently scarred from... yet she doesn't even seem to remember it. I understand Kagome is a strong individual... as well as forgiving... But it confuses me as to why she seems to totally disregard it? Second, you mentioned in one of your previous ANs that this fic is just like so many others... when yes... it is (While I enjoy it very much!) Most other fics like this usually end up with Kagome disregarding all previous treatment Sesshoumaru has mistreated her with and ends up throwing herself at him OR they have Sesshoumaru making a complete 180 turn into some sort of love sick puppy. Perhaps a more realistic approach should be looked into?

Anyway, I really like it. Its enjoyable to read. Please continue.

Ok, I've read this about three times now. It's totally classic. Earlier, you questioned its creativity and while the whole "Sesshoumaru kidnaps Kagome" thing has been done before, its the execution that counts. And yours rocks out loud. I adore your characterizations, as well as the interactions, which are unique as far as I'm concerned.

Can't wait for more!

Oh my god! I love this story! it is so good. I cant wait till your next update, so please please please update soon!!

THANK YOU 4 UPDATING !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

this story is lol so i was happy when u updated
again DOMOU -ARRIGATOU !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

I like the icy analogies in the first chapters. I like the realism you have chosen to use so far. I'm not really sure where you're going with this, but the battle of wills between Sesshomaru and Kagome is very true to their characters. I really don't see how these two crazy kids are gonna work this out, though. Are you sure you wouldn't rather have Koga or Inuyasha save her? The only problem I'm having with the story is that Sessy doesn't seem to be worthy of her, nor do I feel like she should settle for him. He's done nothing to settle her mind or earn her heart. He doesn't seem even interested in earning more than her presence in his life and his bed.

I actually thought there would be another fight between sesshomaru and kagome because of her little slip up, but i like the way you played it off. Does sesshomaru's beast want nothing more than to have kagome no matter how they get her, or the conseqences (sorry for spelling)? But then when they are back together just want her close to inhale her.? Update soon.

To be perfectly honest with you, I didn't read your story, not because I didn't want to but because I simply couldn't with the block style. It doesn't matter if your chapter has a lot of words in it - hey, knock yourself out; the more the better; I like big stories, but it's very taxing on the eyes to have to press your face to a monitor to read back and forth from one of the screen to the next. ASS doesn't have very good backgrounds or color themes that are easy on the eyes. When I skimmed through the rest of the chapters to see if I can power through and hang with it, the last several chapters didn't have breaks at all so unfortunately I gave up.

I'm told it's a very good story and I hate that I can't read it but my eyesight isn't that great. Please consider cleaning up the story and chopping the paragraphs up.

I'm sorry.

Kags357

very good. don't worry about the lack of action, you are proceeding at a good pace and there were a number of issues that you had to find resolution for. Having Koga pop up like that should be fodder for good fun! LOL

There were a couple of things, the most egregious was the use of the word virile in regards to her temper after he dropped her. I think that you might have been thinking of vituperative, meaning berating, scolding, reproachful, rebuking, upbraid, etc. Virile means manly, potent. Then, in his confrontation with the insects, you used the word venous, I think you meant venomous.

As I've told you before, this is a really good story, you've got a wonderfully twisted plot here. I can't wait to read the next installment, but I will because I've seen what happens when readers badger the author to update before ready. I want you to maintain the quality of your writing.

I cannot believe the unmitigated gall, and stupidity, of some people. How did that thief think she would get away with stealing your work? To call her an idiot is to insult all idiots! You were right to take the high road and remain true to yourself. You don't want to bring yourself down to her level. She must be a pretty sad person to stoop to such actions.

Janer

Hello,
I just wanted to let you know how much i love your story. It is officially my fav sesshy x kagome.

i love your writing style, i love the plot, and i love your depictions of the characters.

i really like this possessive/ instinctual side of sesshy your showing. mostly because i have never really seen this done well before. But yours is really well, well depicted. ^^ I don't really know how to say it better. i find his 'inu' traditions and stuff quite interesting. as for kagome, i really like her too- although i feel bad when sesshy takes a hand to her- and could see her acting that way.

personally, i think your story is really original. I don't know why you seemed worried. As one reviewer said before, it's not the plot but what you do with it. And you doing an awesome job.

never have i been so captivated by a story before. ^^

as for the one who took your story as her own, i really hope that is cleared up soon and that everything turns out ok.

can't wait for your next update.
best of luck.
you rock ^^

seriuosly,
i LOVE your story ^^
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dude, this is so awesome possum! hate you for leaving it a cliffhanger though so update soon!

I truly sympathize you for the situation you were thrown into. I really do hope that the author/ess will have common sense, honor, and integrity in taking down the story YOU wrote (which I found VERY enjoyable by the way, great work on it). I know how hard it is to try and be civilized to some people that are just plain rude. I once had a reviewer on one of my first stories yell at me: YOU BETTER PUT KAGOME WITH INUYASHA YOU F*ING B****! And so on and so forth (yaaaaaaaaawn, such a cliche flame, no?). Either way, I had been very upset at first because some people just can't seem to branch out and try new ideas. In the end, I blocked her with a smile.

I congratulate you on being the more mature person in such a situation: I hope that the administrators do their job quickly and effectively by taking down the story if the author/ess won't. It's not fair that someone can plagarize your own work and be given credit.

On to a happier note: I am very happy that Kagome is finally getting a revelation and that Sesshomaru is beginning to at least subtly understand his new intended-mate-to-be. Hopefully they'll work something out.

GREAT chapter! Fantastic as usual...but please...PLEASE I'M BEGGING YOU: put an extra space between the paragraphs! It's getting way too hard to read your fabulous writing without going cross-eyed! lol

Hope to see an update soon!

-Miss Artemis

Poor Kagome !! y is she getting so mistreated ? i would say kick his ass 4 that !
no offense i love the story and all i just hate it when a guy hits a girl , i think thats seriously dishonorable .
i think that sesshoumaru would hurt her 4 that ,m but it's ur story , so go a head
just remember : DO NOT KILL KAGOME !!!!!!!

Woo Hoo!!!!! go kags im very happy that she has a backbone in this story... but whats going on with her powers??? are they ever gonna come into play...

Great fic! Kinda on the serious violent side for me, but it is undeniably well written. Love how this chapter ended, especially since he hit her. Please update soon : )

I like your story very much. I was caught hook line and sinker. I can't wait for the next chapter.

I like your story very much. I was caught hook line and sinker. I can't wait for the next chapter.

OMG i love ur story !!!!!!!!! ^_^
Love it!!!
But god i want to hit both sesshomaru and kagome sometimes>. (no offense i love the way they r in da story and i know they have to be that way for the story to work) But god. I just want to smack them silly for being so ignorant sometimes. >.
lol i love how they are, but i can't help but yell at the computer screen. >. (Looks like someones needs to be sent to mental institution XD)
Any ways love your story so much
please up date soon. i'm dieing to find out what happens next.
Thanks
continue writing
Much Love:
J-angel

First off, I would like to congratulate you on a very well-written and characterized story! It has been a heavenly journey reading this, albeit very frustrating (almost to the point of pulling out my hair and bashing my computer screen). Why? Damn it, I want to see them get together! *Starts whining* This story is so good yet so taxing! I love Sesshomaru's possessiveness and I truly love and laugh with amusement when Kagome gets angry (I love the part when she assaulted him - I laughed even further when she used the anology of attacking Sesshomaru like a football player). Their contradicting personalities shoot sparks and bring life into their relationship.

I think it's high time that Kagome and Sesshomaru buck up. *Pouts* Kagome needs to learn that she is not in the modern world anymore: she is in the Sengoku Jidai! She must understand by now that things back during five hundred years ago is much more different. Back during that time, women weren't given much liberties and were instead only priviledged of birthing children, taking care of the children, cleaning the house hold, chores, and pleasing the husband (and not just sexual). Women were more often than not very obedient and submissive, never questioning their husband. Kagome needs to know this and learn. There have been multiple times where I almost slap my forehead in aggravation when Kagome unknowingly hurts Sesshomaru with her blatant rejections. I mean, I understand her instant rejection of his mating in the beginning. They were enemies, hated enemies. He had tried to kill her countless times and just thinking that she would agree to be eternally mated to him on the spot is suicidal and gullible. But, I think by now Kagome should know that there is more to Sesshomaru than she had previously thought. He has been reasonably gentle and patient with her. He isn't a Miroku or a Hojo, she should know this.

And Sesshomaru...oh boy. There are so many times I had wanted to have the ability to strangle and hit him for his crudeness and lack of communication with the female sex. I mean, worthy? Be honored? Satisfying? Met his standards? What a bunch of bull! I thought that Kagome was justified in ripping him a new one. Sesshomaru wants her as his mate - its obvious that he feels VERY strong for her, but he should know after knowing who she was after four years that she was a spitfire and that she wouldn't be easily submissive. He shows great restraint, but he also needs to take into account that Kagome is human and fragile: she has no idea about youkai mating rituals or customs.

Again, I congratulate you on a story that is worthy of being original in its own right. I read one of your author's notes about the story being a "typical" Kagome/Sesshomaru story. But, you know what? We like them! And for me especially: I LOVE THEM! We all enjoy the classics - a possessive Sesshomaru and a fiery Kagome that creates strong emotions for the readers is why its such a common story-line. I love your story. It is awe-inspiring and well written, very emotional and amusing...and very arousing *blushes*.

Please update as soon as you can.

You have also written about staring at your computer for hours on end, going over different twists to make the story more appealing and mind-capturing. From my own experience, if this will help any, just let it come to you. I know what its like to feel like you're only copying another person's story...or at least the general idea, but that's okay. If its something you like, go for it.

If you want an idea...I think that Sesshomaru should give Kagome the cold shoulder. He should relocate her to another bedroom near him, but out of his personal chambers. And I think that Kagome should think back to what she had said to Sesshomaru and think back to all of his actions towards her. It's way too early for her to fall completely in love with him, but I think that she should come to the realization that she needs to give him a chance to show her that he truly cares for her.

Have a good one!

-Miss Artemis

Honestly? serves him right. you said in one of the earlier chapters that your fanfic was "like 500 others out there" or something like that... well, the idea that sess takes kagome as a mate has been done before ;) but i think it depends on how a fanfic is written, how the idea is presented and so on, that kinda determines wether the story is good or not.
i really like your writing and i think you're a good author. the only thing that kinda bothers me is that you don't make a lot of paragraphs. just starting a new line isn't good enough, you should leave a line blank now and again, it'll make reading much easier because you can keep track of where you are in the text.

other than that... i feel bad for kags. sess is really insensitive and inconsiderate - i'd have thought kagome would be terrified of him by now, maybe that would work because he doesn't seem to like it when she is afraid of him... and the part where he hit her? OMG!!! how is she ever going to put up with him?!?

anyway, i hope you update soon!!! do you have a mailing list btw? if you do, could you please alert me when you update?

i loves this story! You need to update sooner though. ^.^

omg!!! update soon that is such an evil cliff hanger

I can't think of anything better to say than, "I love your story!" Your writing style is excellent and every chapter is just as addicting as the last. It's always a pleasure to log on and see that you've updated. I can't wait to see more!

It was rather difficult to read some of the
print,as it was practically in block form.
Otherwise,it's a good story,and I'll check on it
from time to time,to see if a new chapter has
been added.
Take care and good luck.

i am taking your request for constructive critcism at face value. please understand, i do not intend to hurt your feelings. This is a good story; I wouldn't have made it to the last posted chapter if it wasn't. And if you didn't have talent, I wouldn't take the time to write a critique.

My first criticism, however, is: you are too wordy. You use 20 words where 5 would do. It is better to be concise and clear. I often found it difficult to understand which character you were dealing with as the scenes changed. I think that you could cure any confusion if you tightened the writing. I did notice that as you became more focused on the story, the more focused and less confusing your writing was.

I would suggest being a little more careful in word choice. I understand that everyone uses the term 'impassive' when describing ol' stoneface - Sesshoumaru - but I don't think that insipid or apathetic are really appropriate in reference to him. Insipid means lacking in taste or savor; or in qualities that interest or stimulate. I would hardly attribute that to Sesshoumaru. If I found myself in his presence I don't doubt I would find him very inspiring [probably towards running away]. lol. Apathetic, while it does mean having or showing little feeling or emotion; in modern usage, it is used more in a manner of being spiritless, broken. Dissent means to argue against; descent means to come down; and then there is decent, which is NOT how Sesshoumaru is behaving, at least in human terms. Bare means to get naked; bear (verb) means to carry [He bears the shame], sustain [bearing walls], allow, suffer, endure [I will bear your impertinence], conduct/behave [his bearing was regal]. English, whatever the dialect, is a difficult language at the best of times because it is such a mish-mash of other languages and has the tendency to evolve with use.

You have delveloped an excellent plot. Yes, it is very hard to come up with an original idea, but it is a mark of a strong talent to be able to take an oft-used idea and make it seem new and fresh, as you have done in this tale. Along with that, you have developed some great characters: Kagome, Sesshoumaru, Koga and InuYasha are all marvellously whole people; they seem quite real in emotion and motivation. With the 3 males, you have done a very good job of showing how very unhuman they are in thought and action. Whereas Kagome is so very human.

I have a slight problem with Kagome's behavior after Sesshoumaru smacks her around for leaving his bed and being disrespectful. She is very spirited, I would expect her to blow up in his face, calling him a fucking, bulling coward, mock his courage for hurting someone smaller and weaker than him. Question his wits in thinking she would care for or respect someone who would treat her in such a way. Tell him that she is not willing to lay with him and that if he takes her, it is rape and she will hate him and do anything she can to escape him or kill him. While I don't know where you are taking this, I really felt that you had her fold too easily. You left me with the distinct impression that she is going to forgive him way too easily.

Your Sesshoumaru, inside and out, needs to come to the realization that he is taking a human being for his mate and she will NEVER be an Inu, nor will she ever be able to be the submissive mate he thinks he wants and still be Kagome. If he breaks her to that point, she will become a little shadow person: sad, in pain, living a life of fear, slowly dying of misery. She wouldn't have the strength to produce the wonderful pups he wants. Humans are funny creatures, walking chemical factories. A miserable human has a different chemistry from a happy human. Misery, sorrow, pain, all make a human weak. He needs to realize where his actions are leading and come to understand that HE needs to compromise with her humanity, if he wants the person who attracted him.

Jeez, don't take this to heart, I don't mean any hurt by all this. I think you have real talent as a storyteller and I encourage you to continue writing, it will all work to make you even better. That and I want to see how you finish building this tale and how it ends.

janer

ps: could you quickly castrate and kill naruku? i am so sick of that twerp.

I really like your fic but I'm getting fustrated because Kagome has not retaliated for all the things Sesshomaru has done. I know they weren't on purpose but I bet one little zap would be satisfying. Other than that I luv this fic.

I must say that this story is taking a most interesting turn. you have definately set this story apart form other ones. This story also has a bit of a reselblance to that story by shabopo. this person used to have a story posted..it was very dark and while I don't mind a little angst, this story toom it to another level. so i'm just warning you not to get sucked into the trap so deep you can't get out of it. it happends to the best of authors. Well keep up the good work because I really enjoy this story and can't wait till the nest instalment
~Dor~ 3

I love this story and how Sesshomaru always looks at what Kagome is doing in two separate ways. Please continue writing because I want to see when Sesshomaru finally realizes why Kagome can't see him as a mate as well any other little surprises you have under your sleeve.

This is so good to be worthy is beyond anything I have ever seen. Please finish it. I love where it's going I love this new Sess. He's refreshing like a drink of water. Keep him like this. I like how he's forceful with kagome even dare I say it obessed. XD. Continue with this I can't wait for lemon scenes. You can start them slowly, ya know getting kaogme use to sessy. =D But just a wondering thought. But still have fun with this I love where it is going. Thanks as always.
Your local tori

Hi. I first encountered this story on FF and I'd just like to say that your story is one of the best Sess / Kag stories I have ever read. I like the way you've used a different take on the usual plot and the endless details and description you've incooporated. It's great and I can't wait until you update the next few chapters! Oh, I'm loving Sess's possessive nature. (:

Fan-freakin'-tasic! Keep up the good work I know it gets hard but you really have something here. =^.^= ^3 ( - that s suppose to be a kitty giving you a thumbs up hehe)