ElegantPaws- Wed 04 Jul 2007
Exquisite ending...hurry with the sequel. A gift pf prose like yours should always be shared.

WhiteRose-Kurama- Mon 02 Jul 2007
Wow! That was an amazing fic. I enjoyed every bit of it and I loved the poems b4 each chappie. U came up w/ a very fitting ending. I don't think I've ever read a fic like this b4. Ur an amazing writer and keep up the good work.

Kiori- Sun 01 Jul 2007
I cannot begin to tell you how much I enjoyed your story. So many fan fictions I have read are just so much poorly written drivel. Your story has character development and a beautiful plot that I only wish I found in more fan fictions. There was one chapter in particular that I found It difficult to tell when one character stopped talking and another began, I don’t remember exactly which chapter but you may want to think of putting some sort of divider in so people can tell when you go from one perspective to another, Thank you so much for your diligence in creating such a masterfully written story.

Highest Regards,

Kiori

localsamurai- Tue 26 Jun 2007
I'm confused. I thought the wish turned them all human. Hence the black hair. Are they youkai still?

Mai- Tue 26 Jun 2007
Awesome fic. Just one question. After Kagome's wish, did mokomokosama disappear? I really hope not. I was partial to mokomokosama =(

Violetcarson- Mon 25 Jun 2007
*hysterical sobbing* Nooooo!!!!!!! Why God? Why?!?!?!?!?! Why does the world have to be so cruel?!?!?!?!
I mean, I thoguht it was bad when ASM ended, but this. Its too much...*brightens* Oh!!! I forgot about the sequel!!!! Yay!!!! *happy dance* I just adore sequels, I mean, they totally rule!!! That ending was magnificent, it was beautiful, it was amazing, entrancing, and an all-out 10!!!!! I believe that this is one of theultimate fan fics everr written! I think we seriously need to be ultimately happy, for a little guy named longfellow...

Shanalir- Mon 25 Jun 2007
Great story, with a wonderful ending. Anything more would have ruined it. It really was a great story, and one that I thouroughly enjoyed.

Isis- Mon 25 Jun 2007
*sighs* That was truly and completely lovely! I am so happy to have had the privilege to read such an amazing story. It was sweet and soothing, it was tear jerking and emotional...You spun an amazing tale with your words and the relationships you created are what dreams are made of...Thank you for such a great read...and I look forward to the sequel, from finding out how you brought our demons back, to seeing more of your Inu puppy conversations.....

Kai- Mon 25 Jun 2007
Just beautiful. 3

SesshysKagome- Mon 25 Jun 2007
Wow, this was a great fic. I loved the ending by the way, nice and delicate and sappy. I loved it all.

demon13o- Mon 25 Jun 2007
-gasps-


That was so awesome! I so loved the ending!


You still made it so their demon blood continued to let them live as they would have if they still had their demon sides!


Wow now I can't wait till you start a new one!


Ja Ne!

Insanewiz- Mon 25 Jun 2007
i actually read this... i wish i could do that... then i might sunwat have a life... anyways, love your story and you have a great sense of humor... ja ne

demon13o- Sun 24 Jun 2007
-I stare at the screen blankly for a few moments before raising a hand to grab the meter stick once again.-


-My eyes are still blank while my hand tightens around the meter stick unconsciously-


-I raise the stick and whap the desk near Ivy repeatedly until I realize what I am doing-


Uh....


-I pull the meter stick back and hide it behind my back innocently-


That was so not a chapter! That was so mean!


-I accidently release the meter stick and send it flying near Ivy's hand-


Oops... uh it slipped!


-I sweatdrop for a minute before looking completely innocent-


Can you please update soon!

PWEASE!!!


Ja Ne!

ElegantPaws- Sun 24 Jun 2007
I dont think I have mentioned this before, but you have done one particular thing wonderful well. You understand the term relationship. You allow Kagome and Sesshoumaru to show understanding love and acceptance of each other. In no way are they wishy washy. I truly appreciate that along with your definite writing skill.

Flightoffancy- Sun 24 Jun 2007
This was an elegant and heart-sweeping journey. I am so very pleased that I found this story.

Your writing is superb, your characters are well defined, strong and stay in characters. I was grateful to see Kagome portrayed as a strong woman with a high level of maturity. I was thrilled to see a more caring, stronger Inuyasha. I love him very much. Your conversations with him were very enlightening and funny.

Your generousity of soul, the obvious work involved in this work is to be applauded. I hope to enjoy many more of your efforts in the near future.

Til next time. Deb.

Tiegrsi- Sun 24 Jun 2007
Hahaha. I love your Yasha conversations. :) The last chapter was good, as well. I look forward to the next!

Insanewiz- Sat 23 Jun 2007
HOLY FUCK!!! i'm only on chapter 4 and i love it already!!!! you're so fucking awsome... i ussually don't curse in reviews but this TOTALLY desersoves it... this is the BEST fanfic i've ever read, no joke... i'm recommending this to my friends...

Violetcarson- Sat 23 Jun 2007
You're sick too? I know another fic author who is also sick. Maybe there's something floating around the fanfiction sites... *sneeze* I love your little 'Yasha talks' they're funny!!! I can't wait for the sequel!

WiccanMethuselah- Sat 23 Jun 2007
Oh, crap! I just realized that I haven't reviewed this excellent story even ONCE ... bad Wiccan!! Bad, naughty Wiccan. I'm sorry, as well as embarrassed.

Anyway, I wanted to let you know how much I've enjoyed this unique, intriguing tale. The premise is not one I've run across before and your portrayal of the circumstances has been riveting. To other's eyes, Sesshoumaru might be seen as OOC but, given the plot, I think your Sesshy is right on the mark. I especially loved the way you handled the confrontation with Naraku and the restoration of Sesshy's arm ... GOOD STUFF!

Thank you so much for sharing this gem with us. I will be looking forward to seeing how our intrepid couple goes about locating Sesshy's sister, as well as resolving whatever is going on w/his mom. At least there is the promise of two more yummy chapters before it's done!
:D
~~Wiccan~~

demon13o- Sat 23 Jun 2007
-pokes her through the computer again just for the fun of it-

Yay you updated!

-does a little happy dance before running in circles like a little five-year-old finally being allowed to run around in the open-

Please hurry and update soon!

-looks around evily before becoming as evil as an editor-

-looks at Ivy and pulls out a meter stick and hits a nearby desk-

Get to typinging woman! I must know how this will end in those next two chapters!

Hurry!!

-drops the meter stick and becomes all nice and innocent-

Please!

-gives Ivy the puppy eyes-

Pretty Please!

Onegai Ivy!

Ja Ne!

Langus- Fri 22 Jun 2007
So I'm still of the opinion that this story is AMAZING. It's beautifully written and I love your marriage of poetry and words. I might make one small suggestion though for chapter 9. I thought the meeting between Naraku and Kagome was well written but a tad bit rushed. You really could've used that opportunity to reveal more depth to Naraku's character. You sort of delved into it but then kind of left it hanging by shoving a sword into her chest. If you ever consider editing this work (which I don't think you need to do since in my opinion it's close to perfect) then you may want to glance over that scene and see what you can pull from it. That's it though...I must say I'm thoroughly enjoying this. I'm sure there will be more posts from me later. Cheers!

Violetcarson- Fri 22 Jun 2007
Yay!!!! Almost happy ending!!! Although, I still feel EXTREMELY sorry for Kouga, poor bloke. It was never his fault really. And then there's the whole Shippo/Kohaku/Rin triangle going on. Personally, I'm still voting for Shippo, I just like him more. And, anyways, Kohaku, shouldn't really be alive. I mean, he only came back because of Naraku. He's already had a chance at life, even if it was cut short. Anywho, great job!!!!

Langus- Fri 22 Jun 2007
I've just finished chapter one but I was so thoroughly impressed by your writing that I had to leave a review. To be honest I've never seen a story that involved Sesshomaru's mother that didn't make me groan and skim past it. For some reasons she's always irritated me in fanfiction but you've done her well. I actually sat and read the whole thing, every word, and I felt for her which is a hard thing to achieve as a writer. If this is how your story begins then I am definitely looking forward to reading the rest. I just thought you should know that with one chapter you've gained yourself a new fan. Congrats :)

Isis- Fri 22 Jun 2007
Wow...just wow...this is such a beautiful and powerful story. Wow...I am so impressed with your talents. I was so moved and saddened by this chapter. And for some reason I was struck by this line, "so their gazes met, blood for blue" that was pure poetry... Great job Ivy, truly!

demon13o- Thu 21 Jun 2007
-pokes the computer screen-

Hey!

Hey you!

Yeah you!

Who else could I be talking to?

Hurry up and update!

Yes that's an order and no I will not leave you alone!

Update now!

Must know what will happen next so update now!

-pokes the computer screen again-

Did you hear me?

Then get to typing now!

-grins evily-

Ja Ne!!

Trice- Wed 20 Jun 2007
I know I don't review much but I jus wanted to let you know that I am really enjoying reading this story. You are a very talented writer and I look forward to reading more of your story. It is official I am addicted to this story! LOL ")

luna- Tue 19 Jun 2007
wow!, that was the best destruction of naraku scene i have read so far everything was so calculated and planned i cant wait to read the ending.

luna- Mon 18 Jun 2007
evil, i swear you fanfiction writers are all evil leaving me in suspence.

elvira- Tue 12 Jun 2007
in the first part of the story was kohaku and then out of the blue he just disapeared I even like how you wrote that he was getting closer to rin and wouldn't songo have noticed her only family was gone

luna- Sun 10 Jun 2007
I wouls really hate you and your stupid cliffies if I dint love your story so much!

kc- Sun 10 Jun 2007
i just discovered this fic, and it is amazing! Grammar, plot development, characterization...well done on all three! I'm now anxiously awaiting the end...

Violetcarson- Sun 03 Jun 2007
Awww! How SWEET!!!!!!! They're back together again! Yay!!!! How wonderful!!! And taht little thing at the end, with his siter, I think it really helped everyone who was worried about the outcome of this story have some fears allayed. Great job, once again!!!!!!!

KASEY- Sat 02 Jun 2007
i love this story, its very touching, and it makes you think, wonderful job dear keep it up. and i loved the other story you wrote as well

Isis- Thu 31 May 2007
I love the sweetness of this story...I completely do. You have such a wonderful feel for what it means to love and to trust, and because of that your characters come out showing that depth of emotion. Now...two black one red? I have been pondering that one for a while, but the suspense is great and I look forward to seeing that riddle unfold.
And yes, post whatever stories you want. You should listen to your inner inu puppy!

Violetcarson- Mon 28 May 2007
OMFG!!!!!! That chapter was INTENSE!!!!! I was pacing around my room for half an hour trying to figure what the whole 'two of raven, one of red' thing was. I'm pretty sure I have it all figures out now, except exactly what the guys plan entails. I'm still not sure on that, At least Koga isn't bad, or is he? Was he really doing it on Sesshy's orders, or just acting like it and actually doing it of his own free will? That reminds of Harry Potter and the whole situation with Snape. Anyhow, that was, in my opinion, one of the best chapters, main;y because it really made me think about how the rest of the story will be playing out. I understand who the 'one of red' is and who one the 'two of raven' is, but about the other of raven, I'm pretty sure its miss walking corpse, but if it is her, then where is the other black haired lady who happens to be my second favorite character? (hint: I'll be really pissed if you kill off Sango) and if the other raven is Sango, then what about the clay pot? Where does she fit into it all? And what about Rin? Will she end up with Kohaku, or Shippo? (I hope its the kitsune, he's cooler!) I think I'm going to scream with frustration!!!!! I HAVE to know!!! You'd better post again soon, or I may just tear my head off, and it'll be YOUR fault!!! OMFGOMFGOMFGOMFGOMFGOMFGOMFGOMFGOMFG!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I don't know what to think anymore!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I need some serious scream therapy, otherwise either I'll wear a hole in my floor from pacing, or my head will explode!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Just so you know, I usually don't go this crazy over stories, even really bid bestselling books. You've got to be one hell of an author to draw me iin this deep!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Noacat- Mon 28 May 2007
Go for it! It's always nice to see where a writer comes from and how their writing has progressed. Even better, why don't you do a revised version of the fic? I'm currently going back and revising an older fic of mine right now. It's hard work, but in the end it's worth it, I think.

Anyhoot, good luck with this fic and I hope to see the new/old one soon!

Jenna- Mon 28 May 2007
I love this story so far...I just had to tell you. It's one of the best I've read, and I've read a lot. Keep up the great work...I can't wait to find out what happens. By the way...I'd love, and I'm sure tons of people would too, if you'd put the other fanfiction you wrote up. Thanks!! :D

Trice- Mon 28 May 2007
I say go ahead and post the story because I am really enjoying reading your current story. I bet the story you are torn to post or to not post will be just as good. Have some faith in your skills! And stop talking to Inu, what does he know! ") LOL

ElegantPaws- Mon 28 May 2007
Re Sappy Kags and Sesshy...YES! Go for it.

Shanalir- Fri 25 May 2007
This gets even more intriguing! Can't wait for more.

Isis- Fri 25 May 2007
Oh what a lovely tale you weave. The sweetest that pours out from this story is wonderful. And alas, with so much sweetness you know there is something bitter in the coming wind. I love the way you have delved into the characters hearts and minds. I could fathom a few guesses as to what is going to happen and the meaning of the child, but I enjoy seeing if it plays out as I think it might. But I have a feeling that you will have a way of surprising me.

As far as your pacing, it is FINE...your story flows exceedingly well from chapter to chapter. And your conversations with your Inu figment is adorable. I personally like seeing the person behind the author, it, I don't know...almost connects me more to the story. And you seem to be a lovely person. So I thank you for the brief glimpses into your mind. And your story is refreshingly unique...I am so looking forward to more of this story, I am glad you extended it!

Violetcarson- Fri 25 May 2007
I like the way you're doing Shippo. Its...cool. I hope he gets Rin though, poor little bloke. I mean, I do like Kohaku, nut I'm guessing that mister 'I'm an ugly bastard' Naraku is going to kill him. Again, porr little bloke. Ah well, I love mushy parts, Yay for Kag and Sesshy!!!!!!!!!

Trice- Thu 24 May 2007
I am really enjoying reading your story. It is very entertaining. I hope that through the course of this story you will reunite Sesshoumaru with his mother and sister. I am a sucker for happy endings as well as Naruku being killed with as much pain as possible! ") LOL

ElegantPaws- Thu 24 May 2007
You know, it might not seem important, but few writers ever ALLOW Kagome to tell Sesshoumaru that she finds him either handsome or beautiful. Thank you for doing so. It is important. Yes, as a character he is self possessed, self involved..but with her, he is entirely a different soul..and is somewhat fragile. It is VERY important that she lets him know...she appreciates his aesthetic OUT LOUD. Well done.

Needless to say, beyond this, another fabulous chapter.

Solaira- Thu 24 May 2007
Great updates. I love this fic. Kouga needs to be delt with for his betrayal before he does any major damage. Poor Shippo, to become an adaul over night. ow ow ow. That had to hurt, majorly.

Can't wait for your next update.

Solaira- Thu 24 May 2007
Great chapter. The different types of arrows was cool.

You were not the only one having problems with this site last night, it was a real pain. At least it seems to be working now.

Violetcarson- Thu 24 May 2007
What? Only 8 more chappies? *tear* I have to go sob in the dark somewhere now. Waaa!!!!!!!!!............
Okay, all better now! I hope you do give Yasha a girlfriend, he needs to get a life sooooo badly. PLease kill Naraku in a VERY painful way!! Muahahahahaha!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Violetcarson- Thu 24 May 2007
Phew!! That's a relief!!! You had me worrried there for a minute. I think you're doing a great job right now! I have a coiple guesses as top the outcome of the story, but really have no idea how it will happen. I just hope that a couple of the outcomes I've imagined don't come true. Ah well, I'm loving this story! Keep writing!!!!!!! ;-)

Tiegrsi- Thu 24 May 2007
KOUGA! Grrr....stupid wolf! I would have to say you are doing just fine with your timing, because you DID sort of illude to the fact that it was Kouga meeting Naraku, but my feeble mind totally missed the clues, lol. So, you are doing a good job of keeping me guessing without making me become TOO surprised when the answers are revealed. Good job! I really love this story so far. :)

kotainuchan- Thu 24 May 2007
Not only do I totally dig the story, but also all the Longfellow quotes (ahhhh poetry my first and truest love). I guess that's why I majored in Biology...... Aaaannnyway, FYI Sesshy's sword is the tenseiga. Other than that the story rocks!

Violetcarson- Thu 24 May 2007
Yay!! They get to have a baby!!!!! *fireworks* The baby better not die though, if it does, you'll have a very angry fan attempting to flame you, luckily I'm not too great at insulting cyberly. Hm, is that even a word? Cyberly. Hm, probably not, ah well.
I hope you didn't mean by that quote that they lose the baby, because the ending will be the same as without a baby. How can it be the same if the baby lives? *tear* I hope it doesn't die!!!!

Violetcarson- Wed 23 May 2007
Wow! This fic ROX!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Me likey sooooooooo much!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I ADORE it when Sesshy is all mushy and lovey and stuff, its so AWESOME!!!!! I hope you update soon, and this is a random guess, but I think its Koga who met up with Naraku, right? A;though, I suppose it aint that hard to figue out. Ah well, can't wait for more!! Keep writing!!!

luna- Sun 20 May 2007
I think that the people talkin were koga and naraku, im just posting this to see if my predictions are true but then again i could be wrong.

WhiteRose-Kurama- Fri 18 May 2007
Hey this was an amazing chappie. It was so touching...And I just loved this part of the fic so far:
“Why does it have to hurt so much?”

Sango frowned deeply and smoothed Kagome’s hair. “Why does what have to hurt so much?”

“Love.”

She smiled sadly and hugged the miko tighter. “Because love is something that grows into us. Its like roots growing into the earth. When something comes along and tries to pull it away, part of us gets torn because of it. The nature of living is that we lose and so love hurts because it is always tested. People who come along and envy its beauty try to pull it away and so we ache. But that doesn’t mean it isn’t worth having. It doesn’t mean it isn’t beautiful.”
That's an amazing quote from ur fic that I'll always keep in my heart. Keep up the good work. :P

ElegantPaws- Fri 18 May 2007
Some lies can be forgiven...and the scene was appropriate and well done. So forgive yourself.

Isis- Fri 18 May 2007
Sorry I have not reviewed till now, I should have done it sooner because this story is just lovely. I love the premise, it is different and original. The way you have weaved the loving relationship between the two is both touching and very tender. I have particularly enjoyed the softer side you have revealed of Sess and the stronger more mature side of Kagome. Your writing is very well done, descriptive and emotional. Great job really, I cannot wait for your next chapter! You definitely have a fan in me! (btw..your little side conversations with Inuyasha are adorable...they give me a chuckle every time!)

Tiegrsi- Fri 18 May 2007
Wow, I like the new chapter! I don't think you would need the rating to be at NC-17, though, because you really weren't being terribly graphic. R should be high enough, but of course it's up to you. You did a very good job with the 'intimate' scene. :)
Now...I wonder who is this new enemy? Update soon!

Sess' Sakura- Fri 18 May 2007
I love your story and that was a pretty good lemon. Anyway just to let you know I hope that Sess rips Kouga apart. He deserves it, I never liked him in the show itself but after reading this chapter in your story I don't like him even more.
Well keep up the good work and update soon.
Sakura

ElegantPaws- Thu 17 May 2007
Very romantic, no other way to put this. LOL! Like how Sesshoumaru is waffling on the mating issue lolol.

Equally, there is a level of maturity you have bestowed on Kagome that I totally appreciate.

Hilarious re ruler quip and even though he thought the comment below him...yours truly had to gloat...lolol! Gotta love him, boys will be boys. Glad Inuyasha is doing something rarely done. THINKING...a novelty in and of itself. Well done! Nice to see you and InuYasha getting on famously. He is not a bad puppy earred, emotionally driven being with a basically good heart...but, if he interfers with my favourite duo. I will bitch slap him into the next century!

WhiteRose-Kurama- Wed 16 May 2007
I really enjoyed this chappie. It brought tears to my eyes when Sess realized that kagome knew what happened and then became so protective of her. I got a good kick out of Jaken harming kagome and ending up almost dead. I have this overwhelming sense of understanding/relief when sess claims kags as his. Keep up the good work :P

WhiteRose-Kurama- Wed 16 May 2007
Wow! That was intense and so unexpected. I don't think the idea of Sess getting raped to cause his hatred of humanity ever came up in all the previous fics i've read. This was very well done and i was so surprised by the detail. I felt so broken just like kagome... Keep up the amazing job. You're one of the few fic writers that can make ur readers feel such intense emotions.

Shanalir- Tue 15 May 2007
Great new chapter. I love seeing them grow closer slowly, even after such an abrupt bonding as they had. Can't wait to see what happens next! And good luck on your finals!

Shanalir- Mon 14 May 2007
Really great new chapter! I'm looking forward to Inuyasha's testing, as he tries to make amends and prove himself.

Emily- Mon 14 May 2007
I heartily enjoyed this fic. I enjoyed it not just because you portray Kagome and Sesshoumaru beautifully, but because your writing style is solid and without any massive grammatical or spelling errors. Your vivid imagery and detailed emotional responses of the characters make this story believable. Also, you are the first person to create an explaination for what Sesshoumaru's fluffy thing is and have me see it as credible and not redundant. I love this fanfic and will wait with great anticipation for future installments. Thank you for being a wonderful author, and for being the kind of author that takes time to perfect her craft.
- Emily Douglas

ElegantPaws- Mon 14 May 2007
Absolutely brilliant...wonderful dialogue! Phenomenal...as always.

ElegantPaws- Mon 14 May 2007
It was a complete joy to read both chapters that you gifted us with.

Superb as always and I particularly enjoyed the Sesshoumaru and InuYasha encounter. Very telling dialogue on both their parts. Yes Sesshoumaru, revenge is always best served cold. Something InuBrata would do well to learn and sometimes, just sometimes one needs to damn well pay attention and not believe they have a say in

And talk about absolutely beautifully romantic….Sesshoumaru and Kagome’s for want of better words, devotional reunion.

Just exquisite. Keep up the excellent work.

Solaira- Sun 13 May 2007
Awesome chapter. By the end you nearly had me in tears. It was just that good.

ElegantPaws- Sat 12 May 2007
Oh as a point of interest, you do not have an addy for Author Responses by the way, I would have responded had there been one. Again. Fabulous job! Do well with your school work!

zenfluence- Wed 09 May 2007
You know, If you don't update soon, I shall instigate a riot... That was a cliffy and you know it.... Evil person...

Love it much
~zen

ElegantPaws- Wed 09 May 2007
Naraku needs to die a very slow and painful death with terror in his eyes...yep. VENGEANCE is not always best served cold!

I like the level of maturity you are allowing several key characters to have in this work. For a change, I am not fantasizing on how best to bitch slap InuYasha, how to get the stick out of Sango's backside, and not trying to figure out how low can our Hoshi get lol. Rather nice to have a co-operative, yet remainng in character family. Well done.

ElegantPaws- Wed 09 May 2007
You have done something different with InuYasha...you give him sorrow, but without the ignorant streak. Thank you...yeah I feel for him, but I love that Big Hunk of Aristocratic Doggie..so tough shit!

ElegantPaws- Wed 09 May 2007
Chapter 6 is perfevtion in the sense of giving one of the most well rounded internal dialogues between THIS Sesshoumaru and THAT Sesshoumaru. Dialogue was exquisite, detailed and heartfelt and gave a full dimensional meaning to his internal battles. Poetry in words...not to mention one of the very best definitions of the Beast of Feeling versus the Youkai of Intellect.

Brilliant!

Oh and last and certainly not least...the best clear definition of Sesshoumaru:
I have every place within you. I am you. Once we were not so separate. Once, when your heart was not so cold and your mind not so jaded, there was no This Sesshomaru and That Sesshomaru. There was only I and Me and he who was the killing perfection.

Absolute WRITTEN perfection. Oh in case you missed it. YOU WRITE BEAUTIFULLY.


ElegantPaws- Wed 09 May 2007
Chapters Three and Four are extraordinarily powerful. The first two set the stage. Now, our Sesshoumaru has "somehting to protect...again". Extraordinarily well done IvyStone. I can tell, I will enoy this work, not to mention LongFellow...one of my favourite "Old Dead White Guys" LOL.

ElegantPaws- Wed 09 May 2007
You know your readers love you EVEN more, when you WENT back and made spaces.

*wink*

So far, so very very good!

oh Please- Wed 09 May 2007
I have soooo enjoyed this story. Not to mention your swift updates! I agree, Naraku is slimey! I like your kinder, gentler Sessh. Hope they can get there in time. I like the ideas you are exploring with Kagome's whole soul. It's alwasy nice to see fresh ideas.
Keep up the good work.

ElegantPaws- Wed 09 May 2007
Excellent thus far, a very distinctive writing voice.

Having said that, one minor thing. Is it possible to add spaces between the lines which will greatly facilitate reading.

Beyond that! It is wonderful. Keep up the great work.

magnificentchaos- Wed 09 May 2007
wow I realy like this a lot it is really planned...mine is all random bubbleness but how else is someone suppose to be funny lol. Keep it up I will try to keep an eye on it. Just alittle advise try to space out your paragraphs it makes it look longr and it is a little bit easirer on a readers eyes!!

Chelsea

lady of the mist- Tue 08 May 2007
I love it. I have to say that this is the best story that i have read in a long time. It's thought out and it drew me along. I don't believe that anyone else has thought of something like this. Truly amazing. Bon chance with the rest of the story.

Drianax- Tue 08 May 2007
Wow. Good start to a good story. You asked about the pacing, and it seems a bit quick for Sess to go from loathing humans and Kag (because of her resemblance to Midoriko) to his trying to protect her and claiming her. I just get the feeling that Sess would react a bit more violent towards her, because she had the memory of his rape -- wouldn't he consider that to be just another violation (just of the mental sort)? And I love the idea that his fluffy thing is a small physical manifestation of his beast (is that correct?) -- I don't think anyone has described it that way.. So, cool. Anyway, please update soon -- I can't wait for the next chapter!

Shanalir- Tue 08 May 2007
I don't normally like fics with the kind of abuse that is in this one, but in this, it has a purpose, and is not there simply for the sake of senselessly torturing the characters. I do like the idea of kagome and Sesshoumaru being bound by a shared trauma, and this is very well written. The characters are done well, and the storyline is intriguing. I will be keeping an eye out for updates.

PLease continue soon and you did a good job on the first chapter bye bye

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