I just read this story for the first time and have to agree with Tiegrsi's review. The plot is different in a good way and interesting. But I wish you would go back to the beginning and re-write it. Parts are confusing. Tiegrsi pointed out the obvious ones about Sesshoumaru's left arm and there being no real romance between Sess & Kag. It is suppose to be a love story where she turns to Sess for love. In the beginning you gave him romantic thoughts about her but at the end there was nothing from him. Through his thoughts you let us know that he was "fond of her" but did not "like her". He was thinking this as he was lying to her by telling her that he liked her. Then he was uncomfortable with her crying against his chest, not liking it. This was a complete turnoff for me as a reader that kept looking for when the romance was to come. If your intent was deliberate for them to only be friends, you should not have put this story on this site. Also, you kept referring to her mother as Miss. Only one chapter did you use Mrs. The battle scenes were very good and thought out. And, like Tiegrsi, I liked you using Inu & Kikyo's souls to come to the aid of Sess & Kag. I don't mean my words as flaming, merely constructive criticism in hopes that you will seriously re-think this story and re-write it.

Honestly, this story could be way better with a bit of tweaking. It IS a good story, but there are a few things you might want to consider, and then perhaps edit to make it better. I noticed someone left a snarky comment a while back about your spelling of Hakudoshi's name. I hope you don't take my comments as being snarky, because I don't mean them to be. Just suggestions (constructive criticism if you will) to make the story a bit better, I mean no offense.
First-Naraku is not a 'demon lord'. He is a half demon, similar to Inuyasha.
Second-'Kilala' should be spelled 'Kirara'.
And a few bigger issues-In the begining you have Sesshomaru with one arm, then two, then one again. You need to either explain where the arm came from and why it disappeared again, or edit out the whole 'two arm' bit in the earlier chapters. Also, In the end you have Kagome give him back his arm (again) by making a wish on the Shikon...which you then say disappears, but then in the end she is keeping the jewel purified. That just doesn't make sense.
Those things being taken care of would make the story better. Aside from that, I have personal issue with the very MINOR development of Kagome's relationship with Sesshomaru. This site is about PAIRINGS, (specifically Sess/Kag), and a pairing consists of two or more people actually getting into some sort of relationship (other than friendship), whether it be physical , mental, or otherwise. I have a feeling a lot of your lower scoring is due to the fact that you really don't develop a relationship between them.

At any rate, I DID enjoy reading your story. There were many points that made it quite original, (like the part about Bouyo, or Inu & Kikyou's souls helping in the end), and aside from the things mentioned above, I thought the plot was fairly good. I hope you go back and perhaps re-write this story or maybe add a few more to the site. :)

Man it was awesome the fight an all but I would really appreciate if there was a little more romance added to Sess/Kags an all that stuff though maybe its just me? just hope to see the next chapter soon!

AWESOME...Naraku is finally gone. So sad for Yasha and Kikyou but at least they are finally together (in heaven & not hell). I hope sess can save Kag's family with Tenseiga. Maybe Kags & Sess can move on to a happier level with each other.

Better yet, all the good guys get to come back to life *wishful thinking*

Excellent chapter :) Please update soon.

mmh sad. I hope they will be okay!!

I just finished reading everything so far and can't wait until you update again!

I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?

OMG...you posted two chapters. Awesome...*happy dance* but I'm never satisfied. You must update soon again...they were too short...just kidding...I'm glad you found the time to post let alone two.

Well done :)

Hmmm...very interesting. Great chapter. Tsk...tsk...tsk...on Kags. What was she thinking when she slapped Sess? That would have been the last thing on my mine if I woke and found him kissing me (if you get my drift) *evil grin* LOL.

Well done :)

She smacked him. Well will NAraku take out his anger on Kags's family?

The scene where inu yasha decided to go to kikyo instead of kagome really made me cry. This story is great please continue!

Well done...I thought the last part where Sess makes a commitment to Kags about saving her family and then kissing her was precious.

Update soon :)

Ah . . . yes.
Has some kinks but who doesn't?

Especially liked your portrayal of Sesshomaru-sama.

Review-Fairy-Approved!

Continue!

I'm watching...

in the first few sentenses i thought that it was funny how sesshomaru scolded himself when he said "'No Sesshomaru, remember what we said earlier? No humans for you.'" just imagine sess using that tone that mothers use when scolding a small child, ha, i thought that was precious. another thing i found interesting in this chapter was how in the last chapter that inuyasha and the group apear together every one in inuyashas group at the time were talking as if kagome was already dead.

This is a very good story

Not a terribly original plot, and what's worse is -- you don't even manage to spell the character names correctly. JAKEN - not Jakan. HAKUDOSHI - not whatever the hell you spelled it as.

It would be much appreciated by this reader if you continued your story because I'm finding myself engrossed into it...please update soon.

You are of to a good start and keep up the good work...well done :)

I like it. Good format and style. Also really great dialect (sp?) So it's time to UPDATE!!!!!!! AYAYAYAYAYAYAYAYAYYAYAYAYAY

::scowls:: I don't know why there aren't any reviews for this story....because I'm likin' it. Good Job!