PPLLEEAASSEE CCOONNTTIINNUUEE!!!!!!!!!!!
mac (Chapter 3) - Thu 14 Jan 2016
I love this!!!! <33333
Oh no! Please! Not the ears! Perhaps his potty mouth instead? Ha ha! Please continue this story! I cannot wait to read up on what Sesshomaru thinks when he finds out the Miko is really a demon! How rich!
Nice chapter, keep it coming.
really like it so far thank you.
I just found your story it good looking forward to reading more.
I hope you plan to continue this story, it seems interesting.
wiccawoman (Chapter 3) - Tue 17 Nov 2015
Great story! My only complaint is the paragraph spacing. The way it is now, really makes it hard to keep track of who is talking. Hard to read the way it is. Other than that, it's a wonderful start.
I love it, it was like a warm and fuzzy sort of chapter Sasuke is a great big brother looking forward to what happens next.
Your paragraphs still need spacing. I keep getting lost trying to read your story. i really want to know what happens
Great chapter, keep it coming.
Camille (Chapter 2) - Thu 19 Feb 2015
Love it so far !
just please space , it is hard to read !
I'm really liking this story. My only complaint would be that everything is all one paragraph. Any time someone different starts talking for example, you should start a new paragraph. Other than that it's pretty cool.
This story sounds interesting, keep it coming. Happy Valentine's Day!
Very good beginning. Got me curious as to what will happen once kagome wakes up and to see if the gang will show up at the well? Updat soo please
Heheheh..definitely gonna be on eggshells. I can't wait to read the backstory on how she ended up in the future.
Mona (Chapter 1) - Mon 09 Feb 2015
I enjoyed reading chapter 1 and I'm looking forward to reading more.
Your story sounds good and the plot looks interesting. I am interested to see where you go with the story. But, your format is a troubling to read. When you type this way, it looks like a giant run-on sentence. Its hard to keep your place as you read and hard to follow the events or what's happening.
So, I would really suggest paragraph and sentence spacing. This will help you put emphasis on certain dialogue your characters are having as well as certain parts of the plot. It will also help your story flow a little better.
From what I saw, it sounds good. I hope to see more.
you have to fix the spacing on your story. I couldn't even read it plus the font is small so that makes it hard to read as well.
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