Reviews for Time Lapse by Kar

Saeko (Chapter 4) - Mon 08 Dec 2014

While the story seems interesting so far, and I'm really looking forward to where you take it, you either need to get a beta or work on your grammar yourself. I can barely force my eyes through the paragraphs due to the typos and improper sentence structures.


No Uta (Chapter 4) - Sun 07 Dec 2014

Chapter 4 yuuuussssss! I enjoy how descriptive your writing is. You actually take the time to paint a picture inside the reader's mind. Well done. I see that Kagome sensed this being's aura coming to rescue her. She knew he was of no harm to her it seems. This mysterious person calls himself Kit eh? Shippo?!!! Haha I liked when you added the mixed fruit apple sauce. That was a nice touch. I'm really enjoying this. There's still so much playful mystery here. I'm always looking forward to your updates. I will look forward to the next one. 


No Uta (Chapter 3) - Tue 02 Dec 2014

What a thrilling chapter you've got here! I absolutely love the air of mystery you've added. How very delightfully detailed as well. You leave your readers curious, captivated and longing for more. Well done. I'm anxious to see what transpires in the next chapter. 


LoveAndFaith (Chapter 3) - Mon 01 Dec 2014

Both chapters are great, keep it coming. Happy Thanksgiving!


No Uta (Chapter 2) - Fri 14 Nov 2014

How wonderful to see you've updated so quickly. Oh such mystery in this fic of yours. How absolutely delightful! Hmmm...is Kagome in some type of asylum I wonder? I love how they've both sensed one another's auras. He's intrigued by her and she by him. What a lovely second chapter. Well done and am looking forward to more. Bravo! 


Nile (Chapter 1) - Thu 13 Nov 2014

Can you break your fanfic into paragraphs so it's easier to read. A wall of text for someone who is dyslexic is really hard to read through. Thanks


No Uta (Chapter 1) - Wed 12 Nov 2014

Hmmm...your summary caught my attention. This chapter has captured my interest. This is a rather unique beginning. I've got a feeling this story is going to develop nicely. I'll be looking forward to the next chapter. 


LoveAndFaith (Chapter 1) - Wed 12 Nov 2014

This story sounds interesting, keep it coming.


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