Cool story so far 

Loved it plzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz continue this story...

cant wait to read what happens next.

The story is really interesting and you are being loyal to the characters personality!

Well done! ;) 

I like your story so far. It is very enjoyable. I admire your dedication to writing by posting from your phone.  I like the plot progression and the way that Naraku is using Rin as a pawn in a typical Naraku fashion. It gives the plot a tragic drama that is found in the original story. 

Lovely, keep it coming.

Thank Kami for Tenseiga! This is getting good. Can't wait for more. Keep up the good work!

He is so sick to use that sweet little girl to kill kagome!  I just hope that this doesn't scar little rin forever. 

I love the pace of things! Please update soon! 

Both chapters are nice, keep it coming.

 

I'm really enjoying this story. It's different and hasn't had Kagome being a pain at times by being overly self-righteous.  I'm looking forward to seeing where you take the character development and story line.  Update soon!  :)

Text size changedo near the end. Went from decent size to small, but ignoring that this was a grear chapter. I'm really liking how everything flows

Keep it coming.

Poor Rin -Chan!!!

Ooh, Naraku's in deep now! Not only did he capture his ward but he killed Jaken and Ah-Un! This is getting good. I can't wait for the next chapter!

This is interesting.  Can't wait to see what happens next.

Good, keep it coming.

Great, keep it coming.

What Makes A Dad

God took the strength of a mountain,
The majesty of a tree,
The warmth of a summer run,
The calm of a quiet sea,
The generous soul of nature,
The comforting arm of night,
The wisdom of the ages,
The power of the eagle's flight,
The joy of a morning in spring,
The faith of a mustard seed,
The patience of eternity,
The depth of a family need,
Then God combined these qualities,
When there was nothing more to add,
He knew His masterpiece was complete,
And so, He called it...Dad.

Happy Father's Day!

Interesting story thus far.  I fixed the font for you... this often happens if you use a program like OpenOffice to upload from, or if you suddenly switch between fonts.  That can happen when you least expect it, especially if you're using a program that does not show you the hidden "codes" for fonts and such.  If you have any questions, please PM me.

I look forward to seeing more of this story!

~~Wiccan~~

Nice chapter and Sailor Moon new anime is starting on July 5. Keep it coming.

I'm loving this story even if it has a few misspellings it's still pretty cool so far.  I can't wait to see what happens next!