| Please, please, please update! I've fallen in love with this story after only one chapter and it says you haven't updated since you created it in September of 08 which makes me want to cry 'cause usually if it's been that long since an update, the story's dead and I don't want this story to be dead! >< and I just realized why I shouldn't write reviews when I'm tired because they end up a bit rambley... (and don't worry, I know that's not a word).
Saholia (Chapter 1) - Thu 29 Jan 2009
oh wow, I really think you should continue this. I like how it is written. I hadn't expected that last part though--with Sesshomaru thinking to make Kagome's life hell. I'm seriously anxious right now lol! I NEED to know what's going to happen to Kags...ok, I gotta leave before I bite my fingers off....lol! **adds to favs!**
| After enticing us with the first chapter, when are you going to give us more? There are too many one chapter stories that never get finished.
Lauren (Chapter 1) - Mon 22 Sep 2008
| I like it, update soon please!
| This approach is quite different. No one has completely separated him from his beast (that I know of). This could make for an interesting story. I wonder if his beast will make him court her or because of his eagerness to have her as their mate, the beast does not interfere if Sesshoumaru decides to forcibly mate her. Using force on her would be Sesshoumaru's choice since he plans to make her suffer. I'm interested to read how you plan for him to get past his beast in his plans to torment her. I'm eager for the next update.
| it's good so far, i can't wait for more.
please, update soon!!
Possessed (Chapter 1) - Fri 19 Sep 2008
| Ooh, I LIKE it! Nicely written! I DO want to read more!
| i love it it is soo good you have to write more soon i loved the battle i hope you update soon
Nyuka (Chapter 1) - Fri 19 Sep 2008
| To be completly blunt honest, I have always had trubble with seeing a clear image of a battle scene I normaly end up substituting something from the anime so to see Sesshoumaru with no more strangth than a regular human is a hard thing to picture. but on a good note you got your point across and I was able to fallow what was accruing so it was well done for a fight scene. XD.......Nyuka Myah
| Hmmm... I will be honest. I think you show potential.
Your descriptions are good,and your English is correct (which is good)
I'd like to pin point something though: you describe actions and following events... but there is no emotionnal background, and no "setting up" of the scene. I don't know if I'm making any sense here... but I'd need a bit more depth to really appreciate the good story you're creating.
Keep on working and writing! Practice makes perfect!
Dewa mata ^_^
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| sounds great so far, update soon!
stars (Chapter 1) - Fri 19 Sep 2008
| csn you put the next one up
| This is definitely a different approach. Can't wait to see what is next.
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