Ooo, how sweet XD. . Our little virgin kagome blushing and sessh cuddling her. . Keep it coming
Hello, I like the plot you have going on in your story. However, your story has a few structural and grammatical problems. Some paragraphs have incorrect chronological grammar. Where the subject is something that happened in the past ,but is not a flashback, present tense is being used as if it were a current event. Past happenings should be written in past tense. There are sentences that have repetitive information within the structure. In the third chapter, when Sesshomaru is looking for a place to die quietly, there is a sentence separated by commas that describes what Sesshomaru is doing twice in the same sentence. Thank you for reading my review.
ooo, nice shoot. . keep it coming! :D
uh. i thought they were under attack... what happened.
I LOVE UR STORY!!! kagome is soooo sweet i just love it and i hope sesshomaru falls head over hills in love with her keep it going ^_^
what happened next?? :O
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