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see03 (Chapter 6) - Mon 18 Feb 2013

Sesshoumaru you dunder-head!! I hope Kagome doesn't fail to remind him later that he pushed her away, because what a poop-face! XD

I have the best insults.

Inuyasha, why'dya have to ruin it????


LoveAndFaith (Chapter 6) - Mon 18 Feb 2013

This chapter was great, keep it coming.


see03 (Chapter 5) - Mon 11 Feb 2013

Really fantastic! Have I mentioned before that I love how you're developing the characters? Because I love how you are developing them! And this chapter was wonderful - the level of caring you had Sesshoumaru show felt real. He wasn't falling over himself to take care of Kagome; it more felt like he could justify to himself that he was the only person around and had no choice, while inside he knows he cares XD

Also, I love the pass/fail at the bottom for everyone XD Simply hilarious.


cassandra (Chapter 5) - Mon 11 Feb 2013

Ohhh, is the ice lord finally starting to realize he has feelings for Kagome? I can't wait to see what happens next!


LoveAndFaith (Chapter 5) - Mon 11 Feb 2013

Keep it coming.


cassandra (Chapter 4) - Mon 04 Feb 2013

Awesome chapter! I hope Sesshomaru kicks Inuyasha's ass for not being there to help them!


LoveAndFaith (Chapter 4) - Mon 04 Feb 2013

Keep it coming.


see03 (Chapter 4) - Mon 04 Feb 2013

Oh man, you bring things together so well!! Sesshoumaru's conclusions at the end of each chapter (and especially this one) are so perfect, and bring in really good references to the manga itself!

I hope I wasn't too harsh with my review last week, but I'm glad to know there was a reason behind it. The use of two POVs was much better in this chapter, and I can see already that you prefer to have them separate rather than blended, which its absolutely a fine way to go about it.

I look forward to more ^^


KEdakumi (Chapter 4) - Mon 04 Feb 2013

Inu's gonna get his tush handed to him by the group when he shows back up.  Wonder if Kikyo went to distract him so Naraku could attack.

Can't wait to see what happens next.


cassandra (Chapter 3) - Mon 28 Jan 2013

Boy is Sesshomaru clueless or what? It's plain to see that he's at least attracted to Kagome. It seems as if the qualities he's searching for in a mate, he's finding in Kagome and he doesn't even realize he's doing it! I can't wait to see what happens next!


see03 (Chapter 3) - Mon 28 Jan 2013

I liked this chapter a lot, with one exception! I didn't enjoy that you repeated a scene, telling it first from Kagome's point of view, and then Sesshoumaru's. It's style of writing that I'll never quite understand why it got popular, but most readers don't enjoy it, myself included. It is frustrating to get through a lovely scene, and expect the continuation, only to find we are rereading the entire occurance again, but from someone else's point of view. We know what happened already, so the repetition isn't received well.

If you want to have two perspectives, combine them. It is okay to jump back and forth between characters during a scene, just make it flow. You only need to read nearly every romance novel in existance to see that both the male and female leads have their own perspective, and they are often written simultaneously. You just need to learn to do it well.

That said, other than the repetition, I really loved this chapter! I'm enjoying how well you write the characters, and the small developments that happen in each installation! It feels real and believable.


Silver Fang (Chapter 3) - Mon 28 Jan 2013

Great story. But a bit confusing to read with the large paragraphs. It would make a better read if each of the pargraphs was brokein down smaller chucks. 


LoveAndFaith (Chapter 3) - Sun 27 Jan 2013

Keep it coming.


LoveAndFaith (Chapter 2) - Mon 21 Jan 2013

Keep it coming.


see03 (Chapter 2) - Sun 20 Jan 2013

Ahhhhh, totally awesome! I never thought something this amazing would result from my challenge! Your story is really amazing! Like you said, you need to edit this chapter (man those are some long-ass paragraphs!) but the STORY is there, and the story is AMAZING!

DID I MENTION THE STORY IS AMAZING??????

*sweet sigh* I love this story so far.


Kuro Akuma (Chapter 1) - Sat 19 Jan 2013

This story is filled with wonder as one can only guess how the characters relationships will evolve. I thoroughly enjoyed the characters self awareness and bravery in understanding what must be done.. I can't wait for the following chapters!


see03 (Chapter 1) - Tue 15 Jan 2013

Ahhhhhhhhhhhhhh, that was amazing! So funny, and so silly and so possible! I love the incorporation of the woman's magazine, that was a fantastic way of introducing the six challenges! I really enjoyed Sesshoumaru's thoughts on all the requirements too, just...ahh, I just loved this!

You could benefit from a beta correcting your grammar and spelling, but the plot is there, and it is superb! I can't wait to read more!


LoveAndFaith (Chapter 1) - Tue 15 Jan 2013

This story sounds interesting, keep it coming. Happy New Year!


Luna C. (Chapter 1) - Tue 15 Jan 2013

This seems interesting, can't wait for your next update. :)


Sher (Chapter 1) - Tue 15 Jan 2013

Very nice indeed. I really look forward to your next chapter. I enjoyed reading this one very much. 


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