Keep it coming.
This story is great, keep it coming. Happy New Year!
Maryssa (Chapter 9) - Tue 15 Jan 2013
OH I LOVE IT PLEASE KEEP IT COMING IT IS SO FUNNY LOL XD
iris (Chapter 7) - Fri 11 Jan 2013
uh oh..... wet nude feminine form hmmmm is he tempted????
iris (Chapter 5) - Wed 09 Jan 2013
naughty seshoumaru.... checking out kagome. i thank you for your kind mentioning of my name :)
iris (Chapter 4) - Tue 08 Jan 2013
Ha Ha! Enter the great Sesshoumaru! ....... must say i like that she is now fully trained..... kagome kicks phanny
kathryn (Chapter 4) - Tue 08 Jan 2013
still following your story it has kept my interest so good job
iris (Chapter 3) - Mon 07 Jan 2013
awww shoot, well at least inuyasha is out of the way
(Chapter 1) - Mon 07 Jan 2013
Sorry Guys! My spelling is ok I swear. However the first two chapters were typed on my ipad and the stupid thing keeps changing up what I type :( From now on I'll type on a computer.
Good overall, you may want to get a beta to go over this & double check things for various little goofs, you seem to randomly capitolize things & have quite a few word choice errors.
Pretty good, slight correction here; She was applying a salve ion Kagome's body that Mage it tingle all over. ion should probably be to & Mage should definitely be made.
Well it seems to have a good plot but you do have a few problems, like here; Then he floated into her visiBeat his beauty alone overshadowed the blooms. part of the sentence seems to be missing & Beat is the wrong word, from context I think you wanted to use but. Also a sentence or 2 beyond this 1 you started the sentence with We (more than 1 person), unless Kagome has split personality or something it should be I singular.
iris (Chapter 2) - Fri 04 Jan 2013
love the story...minor misspellings but over all HURRAY! for you
....as always Inuyasha the idiot. **I must follow Kikyo to hell. It is my duty in life**
iris (Chapter 1) - Thu 03 Jan 2013
sounds like a great story, a bit confusing though for the first chapter
First off, welcome to the site. I liked your first chapter---It's well detailed and this is your first fic as you said.
Also don't forget to rate your fanfic (you missed that part) because there are YIM's here (younger ages) who shouldn't read M-MA rated stuff. Just a thought I thought I might run by you.
Lady Nefertiti ;)
kathryn (Chapter 1) - Wed 02 Jan 2013
great start would like to read more
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