Hehehe. Naughty boy!
Both chapters are great, keep it coming.
She should definitely tell him so they can be together :D
D: SHUSH INUYASHA. You're so mean!
lol, so close and yet she still could not spill the beans, very nice.
I wonder when InuYasha is going to finally get a clue. Very nice so far
Keep it coming.
Lumi (Chapter 20) - Thu 31 Jan 2013
When you use actions in parathensis like this, it makes the story read more like a roleplay or a first draft. You might want to put more emphasis into descriptors, especially in the middle of quotations.
Uh oh! I wonder how inuyasha is going to take the news!
Keep it coming.
Keep it coming.
Keep it coming.
Both chapters are great, keep it coming.
I liked it (:
but! Please remember for this challenge that Drabbles must be 100word length while chapters are 1500word length (: ill let it slide this time (; just reminding you!
Both chapters are great, keep it coming.
Loves it! Excellent job my dear!
#patientlybutnotsopatientlywaiting
<3
Mistress
LOVZEZ IT!
*arms outstretched reaching towards the sky* NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO
I wanted it you tease! :P Loved it as always! :)
-Your faithful servant-
MOR
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