Ryo chan (Chapter 1) - Sat 30 Dec 2017

You know it's bad when the brothers agree 


swift death (Chapter 1) - Mon 16 Aug 2010

hahahahahahahahahahahahahahhahahahahaha! that was sssssoooooooo funny. i wonder what the third monkey did to make them get attached to the stone   *hm* *deep thinking*  :)


CritterWhisperer (Chapter 1) - Tue 16 Feb 2010

Oh that was cute.  It reminded me of the episode where those little moneys had two boulders stuck to Inuyasha's hand.  I noticed a few typos here and there, and the syntax of a few sentences was a little awkward, but other than that I thought it was a nice little one-shot.


Stacerue (Chapter 1) - Sun 14 Feb 2010

Very cute! I really enjoyed it. It had some flow issues as well as some grammar but I thought it was neat. You did bring up some interesting questions. You know what they say, practice makes perfect. I would enjoy reading more of your work.


Scherherazade (Chapter 1) - Sat 13 Feb 2010

You brought up a good point.  How is it that Kagome gets kidnapped all the time, and by some pretty lame kidnappers?  In the first paragraph there are a couple of word usage errors, for example, to instead of two, minor, but you might want to keep an eye out for it in the future.


Sessylove219 (Chapter 1) - Sat 13 Feb 2010

I liked this story very much, the concept was cute. I did think that at parts it was a little incohesive, however. There didn't seem to be a good flow between Kagome's thoughts at one point to another, and while the sprites look like Inuyasha and Sessy, I think that their speech patterns would have set off her warning bells immediately. I will definately keep my eye out for more stuff from you in the future!


Angelicatt (Chapter 1) - Fri 12 Feb 2010

Oh Smittee, that's so funny...those 3 monkey sprites are positively devious. Shippou could learn alot.

There was a couple sentence stucture and missing word issues but all in all it was quite humorous...leaves me to wonder if they got the stone off before Kagome got to them


Hairann (Chapter 1) - Fri 12 Feb 2010

Truthfully this story could use quite a bit of work.  There are numberous typos such as 'to' instead of 'two', 'loved' instead of 'love', 'ti's' instead of 'it's'.  Your sentences come off more as if you are listing things rather than telling a story.  And really it seems more like you are talking to your readers, rather than us reading a story.  Kinda like when people tell you about something that happened, rather than reading you a story, if that makes any sense.  And while I think that Sesshoumaru being trick by the monkey sprite was really OOC and it would have made more sense if it was Inuyasha's fault that they were both caught, with a bit of work, this could be a really cute one-shot.


Ikaru (Chapter 1) - Fri 12 Feb 2010

that was pritty funny, but there were several grammatical errors throughout the entire work, as well as some mixed up words, such a 'ti's' for 'it's'....because of these thing i found it a little confuzing but an enjoyable read none the less...


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