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Rachel (Chapter 3) - Tue 07 Aug 2012

Ohy my gosh-that was the best laugh I've had in a whille thank you so much Sandy! Kagome is such a delightful spit-fire and Toga is just great! You are my new senpai! :,D


cassandra (Chapter 3) - Tue 07 Aug 2012

Even though Sesshomaru was kinda an ass in this chapter, it was funny! Keep up the good work!


N'spirit (Chapter 3) - Tue 07 Aug 2012

I love your story espically the last chapter that is one of my favorite songs from the King and I. I was playing it while i read the chapter. Keep up the good work and update soon please. 


cassandra (Chapter 2) - Mon 06 Aug 2012

Sounds good so far! Keep up the good work!


Anonymous (Chapter 2) - Mon 06 Aug 2012

Great work though I've read similar fics like this one before. You might want to revise your writing for you have quite a few misspellings. Also, you rely heavily on "as", more so than I've seen in other's work. You can use "while" or "when" too. In some sentences you didn't really need "as" at all, like, "...intent on completing her errand so as to get back to work...", it could be written like this, "...intent on completing her errand so she could get back to work...."


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