Very good, still needs some grammatical cleaning up and some clarification, but you have a strong plot :D.

interesting...so does Kagome have an extended lifespan or something? also is Sesshomaru already born/grown or has he yet to be made? since Sesshomaru's dad doesn't appear to be all up in her business I'm very curious.

oh man...is Kagome gonna kinda be a cougar?

also in ch4 you accidently posted the chapter twice...it loops kinda in ch4.

PLEASE UPDATE SOON!

I really like how this is going! Please don't feel rushed and go at your own pace I think you'll do a great job :)

I think you're doing well so far!