Reviews for Broken Promises by momo

bookgirl813 (Chapter 2) - Sat 11 Oct 2014

I'd still like to know what kind of demon Kagome and her father are.  There are still a lot of questions to be answered and I hope that you'll encompass them in the future chapters.  You've got a really good start here and am looking forward to seeing things develope.  Will Sesshomaru be at her new school?

bookgirl813 (Chapter 1) - Sat 11 Oct 2014

A good start, but a little confusing as to who Tommy and Maya are.  Yes, as you read further you can figure it out, but an introduction would probably help.  

I hope there is more to explain what Kagome is.

Sesshomaru's Secret Admirer (Chapter 2) - Sun 28 Sep 2014

Kyaaahhhhh *smiles* They met! They met!

Well...I'm getting ahead of myself. Ummm to begin with~ you saidddd you would continue this story each week *_* please continue? Please?

I love how the Father and Kagome made up! It was so sweet! And I totally laughed again when the maid instructed the Father that Kagome may not speak until she had her cookie *fits of laughter* Well done! I love this Kagome so far~

And now...when they met...I guess Sesshomaru isn't his cold stoic self. This new smily Sesshomaru is kinda refreshing. I thought for a second Kagome had bumped into Inuyasha when I read 'damn'.

Anyways, this chapter is well written! I wish you would continue this story. It holds much potential! Will you continue? Please? Pretty please?

Sesshomaru's Secret Admirer (Chapter 1) - Sun 28 Sep 2014

Ohhhhh~ I see so much creative juice! What a wonderful beginning. I thought the first two paragraphs were wonderful. It made me chuckle to see Kagome telling the maid that she won't be having dinner...but asking for a re-fill of chips. I found Kagome's character immediately developed from the beginning. Wonderful!

Now~ as I read on~ I found a few spelling errors. That's okay happens to me too. There was some mistakes like 'here' and 'hear'; 'where waiting' and 'we are (we're) waiting'. Those just need to be looked over constantly. I have a hard time too~ so no worries.

Back to the plot! I found it soooo cute that Kagome has maid...and Tommy is a butler? I wouldn't mind if you went a little bit more detail into how they looked? And I thought Kagome being a demiGoddess sooooo HOT! I can't wait until Sesshomaru meets her!

And poor Father...the maids walked all over him. I feel sorry for the dad...but it's understandable...he is hurting Kagome. Already you have me liking the characters you've created....that's brilliant. Can't wait to read what comes next!

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