i really like how this is in sesshoumaru's point of view, but will it ever be in kagome's?

I really like the switch of roles. Sesshomaru is so cynical and self criticising. I feel terrible for the Taisho's. It's so bittersweet. I hope you update soon.

Hmm..It's an unusual idea, and so far it seems good. But I do have a few things to point out regarding your characterisation. I feel you're really skimping on Kagome's character. Sesshoumaru's is very well etched out, but I wish you'd give him a bit more pride, as pride is after all his most defining characeristic. A broken Sesshoumaru holding on to his pride with all his might should make your story even more interesting than it is right now plus it'll really grab our sympathy like nothing else. And you should also elaborate on Kagome. The readers should get a taste of what she feels and thinks about the Taishos and their situation, and also about Sesshoumaru's avoidance of her. That way, the fic will be about both of them, whereas right now, I feel as if it's only about Sesshoumaru. Sorry if I'm overstepping the line here, I just wanted to give a little constructive criticism. :) Do let me know what you think.

I agree with lesley. I like this idea and hope to see more of your writing.

Its a bout time that they switched places and kagome is no longer the poor one. Well anyhow, I like where this is going and can't waite for chappie 3 please update soon! -slayer0427

I sort of feel bad for Sesshomaru,but not for their father because cheaters never prosper.It's a great story so far I can't wait to see what happens next in chapter 2.

Awe that has got to suck. I feel bad for them. Update sooh.