You have grasped my attention with this beautifully-worded, unique tale. I am smitten with your writing! I really hope you are a frequent updater. You can bet I will be checking back eagerly for your next update. I just want to say thank you for this story, I was beginning to think that creatilve fanfic writers inclined to this pairing died long ago with A Single Spark. This story is truly unique, well thought out and each chapter has it's reader hanging onto every last word.
I love your portrayal of Sesshomaru's mother, it is the best I have ever read of her. I can imagine it is hard to create a character that is never introduced in the actual series. You did a very good job at making her befitting as his mother and also believable and interesting as well.
I like the chemistry between Sesshomaru & Kagome as well despite the awkward conditions which lead to it. I hope you take their relationship further and develope it into something much more than just a forced bond between them. I hope they can personally connect as well but it is in the hands of the author and I trust that whichever way you decide to go will be equally as satisfying to the reader. You seem to know what you're doing.
I hope to read more of Sango and Miroku too. Perhaps they will tie more into the storyline. Perhaps they will become more familiar with Kagome? Only time will tell.
Please hurry and fill in these remaining blanks! I am hooked! A job very well done.
MEA
Nyuka (Chapter 13) - Sat 02 Jun 2012
Well that was emotional ^-^'
But then again the whole story story is emotional ...which is why I love it...this theme is bubbling up inside me its.... going to over flow....burst into a billion chunks of giddy story twitches...
if any of that made anysense, ^-^' try to say your story is awsome and I am impatiently waiting for updates...^-^' But take your time and continue to make them awsome...I will suffer the twitches ^-^
Nyuka
Keep it coming.
AAAHHHH!!!! CLIFFHANGER!!! NOOOO!! I WANZ MOAR!
Kira (Chapter 13) - Fri 01 Jun 2012
Ok I can officially hate you right now!!
Oh my, how can you even think to leave with such a cliff hanger?!?
Truly pure evil!
But wow things are indeed getting good. Now would it be Haru or Kimikyo that goes to Sesshomaru to tell him of Kagome's disappearence? I mean in a way it is kind of Kimikyo's fault for telling all that she did to Kagome, she could've said that was something she was to discuss with Sesshomaru.
Now when Sesshomaru finds her (well I hope you have him go after her), will she finally let it all out everything that she has been feeling? Will he begin to realize that it is more than the pendant that makes him want to be with her but he is harming her by doing so?
Oh please oh please oh please let next chapter be long with some type of reprieve with their relationship. I know it is too early for them to mate eachother and destroy the bond but please!
Keep up the great work (I really don't hate you, your writing and imagination is way too good for me to do that).
-Kira
All good, Happy Belated Mothers Day!
Suki~B (Chapter 12) - Thu 17 May 2012
Amazing! I am Hook, Line, and Sunk. Please, continue to update
~Suki
Two bits of commentary: a.) "What to see if you could break it" should probably be "What? To see if you could break it?" or something of the like and b.) "naural" should be "natural." ~SA
Two corrections: a.) "This Sesshoumaru does not such thing" should be "This Sesshoumaru does no such thing" and b.) "He rose the volcano" should be "He raised the volcano."
Do you realize that you used "Tekuya" and "Tekeyu" to refer to the same character in this chapter?
"stay her" should be "stay here"
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