not bad? actually i'd say this is kinda completely perfect, i can definately see kagome thinking and acting like this if she fell in love with inuyasha, got her heart broken, then sesshomaru and got her heart broken again, i can definately see her at least temporarily disavowing love and the italicized bits were absolutely perfect, adoring that sesshomaru was there like that and yes, he was nicely written too though i'd love to know this story from his point of view

great shot, looking forward to what else you write