Chaos_Queen77 (Chapter 5) - Tue 16 Sep 2008
Another thing are Kagome and Selena from the southern lands or the Eastern lands because you wrote it as both in the first chapter! But its off to an OK start keep it up.

RadioActiveOrange (Chapter 2) - Thu 12 Jun 2008
Hiiiiiiiii I noticed that your story needs to be fixed a bit and I'd like to offer some suggestions. When people are talking you should put quotation marks around it. For example "I'm just getting warmed up, father." Sesshoumaru said. By the way, you said "wormed" instead of "Warmed" cracked me up because I've been watching a lot of animal planet lately and I kept thinking "What if sesshoumaru had worms?" ... My bad, sorry D: Anyways, I hope that little tidbit helps a bit. Toodles

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