more,more,more,more,more,please,please,please,please,please.......
lara (Chapter 8) - Thu 17 Mar 2011
I just found this story & read it all today ....I can't believe it hasn't been updated in so long I really hope you will fiinish it. I can't wait to see what will happen next. Now that I've read this much & you've left off on a cliffy, I think I'm going to die if you don't finish this....what's a person to do ?? It's so sad to see it unfinished..I'm so excited & I'm dying to know what exactly she is & what she'll look like when she changes...I really hope you finish this story or at least decide to continue it.
well...what can I do but hope & pray you will continue & there will be an update soon.
I really look forward to what will happen next
missy (Chapter 1) - Wed 22 Dec 2010
this is a very good, wonderful, great story which i love and like since i first started reading this story your a very good, great, wonderful author who wrote this very great, wonderful good story!
Okay I have to say the story was cool and a bit different from the rest, until this last part naming Naruku as the demon who wanted Kagome. This is not meant to be a flamer however, some changes or writing a bit more would help. Reason the anime prtrays Inu Yasha around two hundred plus years and Sesshomaru around seven or nine hundred years give or take. Everyone knows the story of how Naraku came to be and when. It doen't make sense please clarify this!
How can Naraku be alive hundreds of years beforehand? Especially when Inu Yasha has not been born yet? To get a better understanding I think you should go over this last chapter and give some kind of back up theory for this to work. Until next time.
ShadowKitsune67 (Chapter 6) - Mon 22 Nov 2010
I like your fic so far, looking forward to your update~
amy (Chapter 5) - Sat 20 Nov 2010
MORE UPDSTES!
Great story ^^
I hope your program works again! And update as soon as you can. ;]
lara (Chapter 4) - Mon 15 Nov 2010
I just found this & read it today.I really like it & I hope there will be more . I still fairly new to this site so I dont know if you can get updates
good chapter. update soon!
Thanks,
Lady Nefertiti.
The story sounds interesting but you need to put "quotes" when someone is talking. I don't know which ones are thoughts and which are people speaking. It is also confusing when you go from one person to another speaking...
Kagome jumped backed. Sesshomaru what are you doing here? I don’t know I saw you about to jump into the well and was concerned about your life so I tried to save you and here we are. Which is where? He replied.
Should be..
Kagome jumped backed. "Sesshomaru what are you doing here?"
"I don’t know. I saw you about to jump into the well and was concerned about your life. I tried to save you and here we are. Which is where?" He replied.
I am not criticizing your story.(I already told you I like your story) I would just like it if the story was a little easier to read and figure out. I hope this helps! Keep writing! ^-^
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