It's really good so far. Just a few grammar mistakes.
i really like how there's a mystery about why both naraku and inuyasha's scents are on her, especially when sessy finds her knocked out all scratch up. can't wait for u to write another one, bye :3
amy (Chapter 1) - Sat 09 Oct 2010
WONDERFUL STORY MORE UPDATES!
Karen A (Chapter 1) - Fri 08 Oct 2010
It's starting out ok. But please use a spellchecker?
Waiting to see what you will come up with in the next chapter.
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