Reviews for Must Love Dogs by Jai

MoxyMikki (Chapter 1) - Sun 26 Sep 2010

I thought this was a cute story, and that it was one of the more original ideas I've seen in a fanfiction before. No spelling mistakes that I could see but, a few missed commas here and there. The flow at the beginging of the story was wonderful... it took its time and was well paced. By the second half however, it felt like you were rushing it along to finish the story, and I felt dissapointed because I wanted more. I didn't feel issues were thoroughly resolved, which I usually need to feel like a story is well compelted.... thats JMO. Keep up the good work. 


Kogasangel (Chapter 1) - Thu 05 Aug 2010

I think that this is a very nicely done fic.  It reminds me of the story, beauty and the beast, and because of that, it makes me want to read it over and over again (which I have) and each time, I love it.  I think that you did an excellent job of describing the cafe scene where they met for lunch, I loved how you made Sesshomaru into a trainer for seeing-eye dogs, and it was very romantic the way he went about claiming Kagome as his new wife.  Though, I have never really seen Kikyou and Sesshomaru together, in this fic, I don't mind the mentioning as it was sweet.  Great job on the fic. 


Mia (Chapter 1) - Thu 29 Jul 2010

Aww... This is so cute and fluffy! I LOVE fluff and this oneshot pulled it off with a great storyline!

Only one criticism. I think that this particular plot would've been better for a chapter story. The events feel a little rushed to me and the fact that they knew each other for less that a whole day before professing their love is a little unrealistic.

Besides that, it's a great fic overall! Good Job!


Dragoness (Chapter 1) - Sun 04 Jul 2010

I liked this story very much. It was well written and very sweet. The only thing that bothered me a little was Sesshomaru moving so fast. I can kind of see Kagome maybe moving so fast but Sesshomaru has always seemed a little too calculating to make such a big decision in one day. Other than that I thought it was absolutely wonderful, and very romantic.


Kerii (Chapter 1) - Sun 04 Jul 2010

   I do like the originality of the story. I feel it was well written. I only noticed one error in it as far as the grammar went. That was where Sesshomaru puts down his tea to reply to her, she was used instead of he. The first part of the story was really good, but, I was not really into the second part. Nobody moves that fast into an engagement. Also, the Kikyo part did not really fit. It was different and original. However it was very OOC, especially comparing Kagome and her together. I would love to see this expanded a bit more. Your writing is very descriptive and I enjoyed reading this.


Chalkbutterfly (Chapter 1) - Thu 01 Jul 2010

Hmmm... I liked the idea of this fic, Kagome meeting Sesshoumaru on a blind date, and the "must love dogs" cracked me up, but I think it moved a bit too fast. Sesshoumaru is Lord of the Stoic, so I think him acting so tender and caring on the first date is a smidge OOC, and as a rabid Sess/Kag fangirl, Kagome being chosen because of a resemblance to Kikyou is a pet peeve of mine, although having Sesshoumaru, instead of Inuyasha, do the choosing on those grounds was an interseting idea. I loved the part where Kagome thought Sesshoumaru was blind, and Sango and Miroku setting Kagome up on a blind date was a good idea, but I think you rushed it a bit by trying to cram an entire relationship into half a day. Expand a bit - I would enjoy a longer fic! All in all, though, a good read, so well done!


Ikaru (Chapter 1) - Thu 20 May 2010

I thought this was a lovely and original idea, and very well written for the most part. I found no spelling or grammar mistakes, and for the first half everything was described wonderfully. However when you got to the second half everything seemed to be going in fast foreward. It was very rushed and I found it very difficult to believe that in only one day they would decide to get married/mated. It also seemed that he was only useing Kagome as a replacement for Kikyo, and the fact that she didn't notice or seem to mind at all bothered me a little bit.

I believe that if you slow down the second half, and spread it out a little that things might fall into place a bit better. So in short you had a wonderful start to this story, and with a little reworking on the second half, this story will have a bright future, so kep up the good work and I'll be looking foreward to more of your work in the future.


Hairann (Chapter 1) - Wed 12 May 2010

This story started out really decent, it was unique and very well written.  The details were beautifully done and it flowed nicely.  There was a missing word that I noticed, 'just the waitresses and waiter her only companions.' should have been 'just the waitresses and waiter as her only companions.'.  Also, remember to seperate discribing words with commas.  Other than that, the first half was perfect, but I'm not really a fan of the second half.  It seemed rather rushed and out of character for both of them.

The idea of him pretty much using Kagome as a replacement for Kikyou, just like Inuyasha did, was kinda off putting for me and they jumped into love and marriage the first day they met.  I think reworking the last half could go a long way to helping to make this story really shine.


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