I love this story so far and seriously can not wait to read more. I actually worked at a Petro truck stop myself, down in San Antonio, and our rivals were TA and Flying J lol. I love Jak being in this story, I felt you made his character perfect to fit not only him but the story as well.
A tip for future chapters, add in some time at The Iron Skillet, mixing their mash potatos and brown gravy and dipping french fries into it is awesome :).
Ikaru (Chapter 3) - Fri 10 Dec 2010
This was a great start so far, I'm wondering how you are going to bring Sesshoumaru into the story already. This is a very unique story so far and I'm very interested to see where you go with this. Very well done and keep up the good work!
I really, really like this story so far! I like how you are so detailed about everything (like what the Hello Kitty jacket looked like) and everything, I can't wait to see where you take this story to. Please keep up the good work...I wanna read more! lol ^-^
Wow, this was really interesting. You set it up very nicely and I am looking forward to seeing where you go with this. Great job.
Awesome story so far! A very unique situation for a fanfiction for sure :) Can't wait to see what part Sesshoumaru is going to play in this story!
Interesting start. I have to admit the first chapter was a little hard to get through, mostly for personal reasons, but I'm glad I stuck it out. The plot seems to really be coming into play now, and I find myself looking for chapter 4! lol Keep it up!
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