Reviews for Progression by Sidhe

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Phantomlogic (Chapter 1) - Mon 15 Feb 2010

OMG STEAMY!!!  I am so excited to see this story updated!  I was hopeful, since TtM was being updated, but now, I can almost die happy...I just need a little more!

Can't wait for more more more!


TruGemini (Chapter 6) - Sun 14 Feb 2010

This story is awesome. you have done such a great job. I can't wait to see where it goes next. from the beginning, the unassuming Kagome and the oft ignored Sess. To develop the relationship of being best friends and no one really knowing how close they are to how she became his balance is just terrific!


Wynter89 (Chapter 6) - Sun 14 Feb 2010

Wow that was pretty hot! 

I loved it.  How would've thought that Kagome would do *_______* in a bar!  That is ONE Devious Inu!  I wish I had one!

Good luck!

Keep up the amazing work! XD


Kanna37 (Chapter 6) - Sun 14 Feb 2010

Wicked, sexy, and seductive - I absolutely adore your portrayals of Sesshoumaru.  Cannot wait to read the rest of this story!

Amber


1CarinoInu (Chapter 6) - Sun 14 Feb 2010

Oh yes, yes, yes.....a wonderful update for such a wonderful story!  FIrst Through the Mirror, now this...I am so ecstatic!  Lovely work!  Progression is such a fabulous piece.  I look forward to more :)


knifethrower (Chapter 6) - Sun 14 Feb 2010

Oooh, that was so amazing!  I hope you write a lot more of this story...  I can't get enough!


knifethrower (Chapter 5) - Sun 14 Feb 2010

We know how protective Sesshomaru is of Kagome, so we know being ravaged by him will translate into being ravished...


knifethrower (Chapter 4) - Sun 14 Feb 2010

Yes, the extreme sexiness of tattoos.  Sighs.


knifethrower (Chapter 3) - Sun 14 Feb 2010

As in "Through the Mirror", which has been one of my favorites from the beginning, I adore your characterization of Sesshomaru.  You have totally nailed his animalistic yet deliciously aesthetic appeal.  And the contrast between his power and animal magnetism and Kagome's spunky, soft, and wise personality.  I like it when a character's personality is revealed by their interaction with others, as you have done in portraying Kagome's relationship with InuYasha. 


knifethrower (Chapter 2) - Sun 14 Feb 2010

Aaah, I love this story, Sidhe!  It is...  all that!


knifethrower (Chapter 1) - Sun 14 Feb 2010

Yet another great story that I passed over, back in the days when I was discovering fan fiction, and couldn't get into AU stories.  But on the other hand, what a wonderful Valentine's Day present.  Yum!


TruGemini (Chapter 2) - Sun 14 Feb 2010

Wow, so he realized that he wanted her, but stopped himself due to her age, not because he didn't want her. Poor Inu, as usual he just doesn't get it in time and due to his own selfish reasoning, misses out. And the way Sess handled those Kumoyoukai...nice.


(Chapter 6) - Sun 14 Feb 2010

Nag? HAH, not in a million years! what some might mistake for it, I call simple PROPER motivation! ^.^


Rowdys girl (Chapter 6) - Sun 14 Feb 2010

Sidhe:

Thank you, thank you for the dedication, but, are you telling me that I'm a...nag? (I have no mane, no tail, no hooves, I must be wrong in my interpretation.)

This chapter is so good, so well written, this is you at your very best! Furthermore, it is worth the years of waiting!Thank you! Thank you! Thank you!

As I read through it, I noticed a number of places where commas would be techically required, but I realize that those commas would destroy the flow of your prose, which runs so beautifully, like a river of poetry. This is one of the loveliest accounts of love-making I've read. You impart his tenderness for his tiny female, his care in handling her and the depth of feeling behind his actions in such an evocative manner, even though he is what, in a human, would be considered a sociopath; and you do it with such clarity. You don't candycoat these characters, they are what they are, and that's how you have presented them, flaws and all. And you wonder why people clammor for your writing!

I would also like to add kudos to Chaos, she is a marvelous beta! I remember your writing Before Chaos, and I can see that she has an excellent understanding of how to best edit your work. The two of you are an incomparable pairing and I hope you continue for years to come.

Now, you know me, if I see something, I feel the need to bring it to your attention. Even the best of proofreaders will usually catch, perhaps, 65%-75% of the errors. And Chaos is one of the best I've seen.

flight across the [pushily] plushly

on the way her body writhed and flexed with her efforts to escape, her  (Just a suggestion)

An odd thought, being canine as he was,  (comma at the end of thought, in case you can't see it, cuz I can't. lol)

But, just like before, when (comma)

cause him to beat her, as most Inu males would in this situation,  (comma)

had earned those strangers a bright, shining lesson in true pain. (I love this phrase, it is so perfect a description of Sesshoumaru's actions with the male youkai who had injured Kagome.)

and the only reason the males currently littering his lawn were not yet fit for pine boxes. (and this is another phrase that is absolute perfection of description!)

The unfamiliar sensation shocked through Kagome’s body like [lightening] lightning,

then the broad palm cupped over her mound[,] suddenly struck  (actually, this comma should come out, it is unnecessary and disrupts the flow of the sentence.)

Even if it meant [reigning] reining in and crushing down

reassure himself that, while she might have been frightened, she was not broken. (comma)

And, in a curious way, (comma, parenthetical phrase)

Was he sorry for frightening her: [unquestionable] unquestionalbly.

a new year’s fireworks finale.

that piece that had decided to hide under a cowardly mental rug with its proverbial fingers in its ears while humming during the entire event, (I LOVE the picture you paint with this phrase. You use words the way an artist uses paint or ink. Brilliant description.)

mapped by hands that cherished and pleasured every inch, (This is such a beautiful word to use in this depiction of making love; it turns this from a lemon scene to a LOVE scene.)

He could no more have prevented the pain of her lost virginity than he could have pulled the moon from the sky. (This is pure poetry.)

Rowdy

 


TruGemini (Chapter 1) - Sun 14 Feb 2010

I loved this first chapter. this is definitely a great start. I can't wait to see where this goes. i see jealousy issues starting up already.  I noticed a couple boo boos and am putting them at the bottom.

 

At first, she had been hesitant, not wanting to impose herself of(on) folks who didn't know her.
Of(Or) if they just needed someone to listen to their troubles.
She's (She) blinked, before dumbly shaking her head
Something onscreen had chosen that exact moment (to) roar and cause a huge commotion


 

 


Beautifully Wicked (Chapter 6) - Sun 14 Feb 2010

OMG Sidhe!!!!! I've waited for sooo long thank goodness Rowdy cracked her whip, and of course Chaos who is wonderful! Thank you for your awesomeness and I LOVED THIS CHAPTER!!! I cannot wait for more!!! OH btw HAPPY VALENTINES DAY!!!!!


toranushi23 (Chapter 6) - Sun 14 Feb 2010

Sweet!! I love you for updating this story!!! Thank you, thank you, thank you!!!  Have a happy V day!!


Wood (Chapter 6) - Sun 14 Feb 2010

Another update to a story... YEAH. Thank you...


Luna Tenshi (Chapter 6) - Sun 14 Feb 2010

I would sign in properly to review but I can't remember my login, and couldn't wait to remember it in order to review this.  This update just made my freaking year!  I am so so so so happy to see you back as well as your wonderful stories.  It is 3:30 in the morning and should have long been to bed, but once I saw this I just could not go to sleep for it would have been a futile attempt knowing that this was posted.  I've been out of reading fanfic for awhile, but am most definatley happy to be back and to come across this, one of my favorite stories.

I love how this story has such little dialog yet you miss none of it.  It flows and the details are just perfect, not so much that you start to think "get on with it already" yet also not lacking to the point that one is left feeling "that's it? seriously?".  There relationship is perfect, he is so intense and yet she gets him, with out a doubt.  I can't wait to see more, even if I have to wait another year or so, I will not give up on this fantastic story (but I really hope it won't be that long ;-)

Sorry if the spelling is horrible and this doesn't really make sense but again, it's 3:30am and I'm just so freaking excited.  So looking forward to more.   


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