OKAY. I must have been blind to have NOT noticed this amazing update, and to think I was still waiting for it like an idiot!! Somehow, I keep missing out on updates from Dokuga, and I find the alerts in my junk mail box!! But never mind, I still found the story and of course I am going to read it!! (pulls out loads of paper towels just in case I drown in my own nose bleeds)
First of all, THANK YOU SO MUCH!! Love, you actually dedicated this amazingly PINKISH piece to me!! You know how much of a gutter-brain I am, and this made my day...no, make it week!! It is soooo amazing. I am typing all this before I actually read, just in case I collapse and go into a vegetative state LOL. Thank you for the dedication; I really am honored, especially since this is an award-winning piece of yours.
Now, on to the story itself. The first section was downright wicked!!! OMG that is a CHURCH for God's sake. But...as forbidden and naughty as it is, it is so damn hot. I had to fan myself and grab a cold drink. The two of them are such a horny pair but at the same time, they are too hot! Did she even manage to walk?? Gosh. I would probably need crutches after...THAT. But I will never regret if I were Kagome!
And as if church scene was not naughty enough, you had to kill the readers with a blowjob-under-the-table scene. ZOMG. Can things get steamier?? I was wondering where the bride was as well, and I reminded myself because it was your story, there must be a twist somewhere and GOSH!! SHE WAS UNDERNEATH THE TABLE. Sesshoumaru, you lucky doggy!!! It was so exciting to read that; I kept blushing and stealing glances at the screen because I was afraid for them that they might get caught and GOSH. He groaned. LOL!! That was also a wicked one, but it is because of this wickedness that I absolutely adore you.
Cuts and bleeding appendages are just so...kinky. They oddly reminded me of Blood Stained, and well, some blood is always hot and raw!! I love the third section as well, and GOSH IT WAS MILE-HIGH CLUB PLUS BLOOD. Can things get kinkier??? I pity the flight attendants who had to clean the bathroom up, but I pity myself more because I WANT A SESSHOUMARU OF MY OWN TOO. Did I just say that?? Oh yes, I just did. That was an amazing one, Maddie!! The use of the word 'devour' is...mind-blowing.
The next one was much of a pleasant surprise as well!! Anal...WOAH. It was sooooo hot; your descriptions made it easy to visualize everything and I just had to tell you how much I blushed and loved it at the same time!! Getting caught in an elevator added to the thrill of everything else, and gosh, can you get more creative?? I was wondering just how amazing this final chapter would turn out to be and you definitely outdid yourself with the amazing creativity, boldness and great writing!!
They need more bed action!! But knowing the two, it wouldn't be long till they got some action. Such yummy goodness. I love the smut you write!!! :) :) :) I need to go bathe now, though. Before I melt into a puddle of goo or something.
Dear Maddie, the dinner actually turned pink. Need me say more? LOL.
And you actually asked us if we want more SMUT from you?? OF COURSE. OF COURSE. OF COURSE. PLEASE.
TKE (Chapter 4) - Mon 21 Jun 2010
That was awesome!! Definitely more!!!
love you so much (Chapter 4) - Mon 21 Jun 2010
loved how you incorporated the title into the fic! i wasn't expecting the elevator scene!! Hilarious, but awesome! thank u for sharing your epic fic!
Amy (Chapter 4) - Sun 20 Jun 2010
MORE SMUT STORIES PLEASE!
Madison, I'm hereby issuing you a speeding ticket for writing too fast! Next time read the chapter over outloud! You will catch your errors that way. And don't ask what kind of anal retentive idiot can proofread a chapter as hot as this one is...
[ ] means delete. Bold means should be changed. Italics means suggestion. Underscore means to add a letter or make 2 words one.
nearly [rip] ripped off her white dress.
but he [he] shredded her panties to pieces.
[But] Nonetheless she was right,
he ran his claw fingers down her tight (her tight what?),
He would fuck her until she was [pup,] pupped
He trailed one of his claws
everything [her] she and Sesshomaru had done...
This was probably one of the most decent things
as much as [if] when he was taking her rough and wild.
Sesshomaru didn't have [much] many clothes on.
as he pictured their families' faces.
to [nib] nibble at her neck
[you've] have you moved on to the honeymoon part already?
And in this first section at the end before they go out into the church to be married, shouldn't Sesshoumaru put his clothes back on?
Immediately Sango [though] thought
Perhaps they had missed each other [of] by a few minutes
The guests weren't really paying attention to him,
It didn't take long for her to [being] begin feeling
as he dug his claws into the armrest of the chair
nearly baring his fangs
they had done it in weirder places,
She bit [on] her bottom lip, (While not technically incorrect, it would sound better if she chewed on her bottom lip or just bit her bottom lip.)
Once he [would get] got to her
And I've run out of steam! I want to just read the rest of this very hot and very good PWP! LOL!
Woowww that was amazingly hot! I wouldn't mind seeing another fic like this from you, great job :)
I honestly love this fan fiction and I hope you continute it. Way to go! Keep up the good work and I hope that you keep on writting this.
i need a cold shower! thats awesome!
>_> smut muses are the bestest! =x
*is re-reading so i can get to chappie 4!
Awesome way to end the story! :]
I loved everything about it; the lemons, the characters, the whole title in the story!! xD
You should TOTALLY do another smut!! You are an amazing writer! Keep it up!! =]
Sala (Chapter 4) - Sun 20 Jun 2010
Vegeta slammed harshly in and out of her tight pussy, grunting and groaning.
Um...are you, perchance, also writing a DBZ fic? *winks*
Serena (Chapter 3) - Sat 10 Apr 2010
loved it! maybe you could make sesshy tie kagome to the bed and give sesshy toys to use on kagome.
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