I was hoping for a happily-ever-after ending but I guess this is the next best thing, given the circumstances. The plot was interesting and the portrayal of Kagome was good. Thanks for the story! =)
I loved the set up for this. And I find the concept of the ending very intriguing. However, the closer the story approached the climax, the more sloppy and rushed it became. By the end I was so frustrated by the lack of development and pacing that I just finished then exited the tab to immediately search for another story. My review now is of my impressions after some time.
Don't get me wrong, you're one of my favorite authors on this site; I just feel that this is one of your weaker stories, even though it has so much potential to be the opposite.
(Chapter 33) - Fri 11 Nov 2011
Did not see that one coming, bittersweet and sad. I really liked this story, it was quite different from others I've read and every so often I get in the mood for one that doesn't end all happily ever after. Just a couple comments: Naraku did actually have a human night in the anime (haven't read the manga), he's just able to choose when his is. Also, and I don't mean to come off rude and apologize in advance if I do, I personally think you used "umber eyes" way too much. Occasional use throughout the story is fine, but using that nearly every time you reference Kagome's eyes is a bit of overkill. Other than that, the story was fine. A few mistakes every so often but nothing I couldn't automatically correct while reading and nowhere near being annoying enough to stop wanting to know what the heck you were going to do next!
headalphafemale (Chapter 20) - Mon 17 Oct 2011
Good story! Go Kagome! This was quite a cat fight. To bad Inuyasha and Koga missed it. They probably would have shared a bag of chips and cheered Kagome on. I like it when Kagome has spunk. Her flopping around like a fish and having no power but tears can really get old. When there is a tender moment in a story, she doesn't have to be sick, wounded, or scared all the time. Sharing and caring can be in many ways. Kagome is a tender heart and its nice to see her back it up. Thanks!
headalphafemale (Chapter 14) - Tue 11 Oct 2011
Sorry, but I found myself yelling at Kagome's actions while trying to help Sesshomaru. Your writings from Sesshomaru's perspective helped explain alot, as to "why?" she did things the way she did. I didn't like all her suffering and have seen this charater behavior of Kagome way to often. Sometimes she seems dumber than a dumb blonde. She has powers but can't use them well?? And watch out if there is a nearby tree root!!! Your story line is good and I really like Inuyasha's character, because he is crude, but sweet, after all they are good friends and have been through alot together. There is one thing I do expect from any story I read here, and that is that somewhere and at some time Sesshomaru will be with Kagome. Thanks!
(Chapter 33) - Wed 28 Sep 2011
Aaaahhhhhhh! *sadface* A very Japanese fairytale ending. But *SADFACE!!!* I really enjoyed it, good luck with your other stories.
(Chapter 33) - Fri 23 Sep 2011
I really liked this story, the plot was very unique. I don't think I have ever read something like it. However, I do have a couple of suggestions. Throughout your story you have quite a few grammatical errors and while I could normally understand what you meant, these errors are still annoying and easily fixed. Also, I think you have left several questions unanswered that really do require answering. For example, what are the priests going to do when they discover their plan didn't destroy all of the youkai? What's to stop them from just purifing the rest of them? Also, the creation of a new jewel is nice and all, but it doesn't really make sense. The Shikon on Tama was created during a battle between Midoriko and another youkai. The warring situation of the battle is what provided the energies and such necessary for the creation of the battle. Anyways, like I said, I really enjoyed the originality of your story, but I feel that these issues are something you should think about.
(Chapter 32) - Fri 16 Sep 2011
I feel like that was a setup and if the next chapter is the last one that a ton of stuff is going to go down. I mean I'm looking forward to seeing the whirlwind finish and yet at the same time almost don't want it to end. Will Kagome be able to get there in time and what is she even going to do and will she be able to pull it off? Then where will that leave everybody? Even if she saves this few will they go into hidding cuz those who set out to kill them probably won't stop when they realize they missed a few. Well I can't wait to see what happens next :)
Sometimes, I read reviews before I leave my own and I have to shake my head. Some people focus on the wrong aspects of a story. Honestly, why point out that you used 'umber'? It's beyond me. Either way, I suppose people have a right to voice their opinions. Anyhoo, fantastic work. I say this because you did this with a simplistic plot. There isn't twists and turns. You made no great effort to come up with something in the left field. You managed to take a simple moment and create an orginal story. That is what makes a great writer. I hope you continue, I would like to see what else is within your power.
Thank you for your hard word.
(Chapter 31) - Mon 29 Aug 2011
I guess in this case the truth didn't hurt Kagome but its going to hurt Sesshoumaru's mom. I wonder how they are all going to pull this off. I can't wait to see what happens next :)
(Chapter 30) - Fri 15 Jul 2011
Uh oh...seems like they are being found out. I wonder what that means for our struggling heroes. I can't wait to see what happens next :)
(Chapter 29) - Fri 01 Jul 2011
You have spun yourself quite the tale. The ups and downs and twists that you have smoothly entered into the story. Kagome I don't know if she has matured or just spent enough time in the feudal era but seems more matured. A little different and yet Kagome at the same time. I have enjoyed reading your story and can't wait to see what happens next...it is sure to be one heck of a plan :)
(Chapter 29) - Thu 30 Jun 2011
(Chapter 27) - Thu 02 Jun 2011
I am just wondering how Sesshoumaru is handling this situation with the "beating" he gave Kagome?
i really liked this chapter. I love this story and I can't wait until the next chapter! <3 ^_^
Good plan. Dangerous and painful. But good. lol Thanks for the update, look forward to see what happens next! Keep up the good work!
I like the story but it is really annoying that the only description you use is 'umber' when referring to Kagome's eyes when it could simply be wrote as her eyes i.e. "she rolled her umber eyes" could have just been "she rolled her eyes".
Other than that I think it's a good story with a lot of potential.
(Chapter 23) - Wed 08 Sep 2010
makenzie (Chapter 23) - Tue 07 Sep 2010
|Good to have u bak hope u update soon
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