Rainyaviel (Chapter 2) - Thu 26 Nov 2009

^.^ Nice chapter, I'm glad that you've decided to put the suggestions you've recieved to good use. Constructive criticism is a very powerful and wonderful tool. I hope that I will recieve as much when I start posting my own fanfiction. I look forward to hearing more about Sesshoumaru and Kagura's relationship as well as Kagome's life before meeting Sesshoumaru. Did Kagome get severed from her social life by Inuyasha? Was he so controlling that she wasn't allowed to see or speak with her friends and family? What about Sesshoumaru? What attracted him to Kagura and why does he feel he still wants to be with her even though she put him out in the past? Just some ideas to help get the muse flowing :)

~Rainyaviel


sesshys_jaded_samuri (Chapter 1) - Wed 25 Nov 2009
I think that this sounds very well planned. It is rather interesting and though there is really not much interaction between them in the first chapter, You still get a clear picture of what is going on with them. My only question is - What did he say to her to piss her off like that? I really want to know. I look forward to the next chapter.

Rainyaviel (Chapter 1) - Wed 25 Nov 2009

Interesting concept, I look forward to reading some more. It would be nice to know just how Sesshoumaru came to be involved in a technology based relationship as that is definately not his style, or... well... I suppose relationships in general aren't really his style are they? I'd like to know more about their lives before they "met" eachother, it would greatly help develop their characters for the story and help us to understand where they are both coming from.

All in all, good first chapter, I look forward to reading the upcoming ones.


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