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Onliime (Chapter 5) - Tue 01 Dec 2009

I also find it ironic that Rin's name means dignified, severe, cold when she is anything but. One would think the name more fitting for Sesshoumaru. Although maybe it was done this way to sort of link the characters together whose knows but it is fun speculate.


autumngold (Chapter 5) - Tue 01 Dec 2009

If I was Sesshoumaru, I wouldn't have left Kagome with Inuyasha.  Especially after he almost killed Rin.  Hopefully his bath won't take long and he can come back to Kagome.  Thank you for the update!  I can't wait for the second part of your chapter!


chevonne knowles (Chapter 4) - Mon 23 Nov 2009

wow this is good I had been wondering abou this story.

I am glad i read it. Why did you leave it that way Nooooooooo.

lookin forward to an update.


Miko Anna (Chapter 4) - Mon 23 Nov 2009

Flawless.  Simply flawless.  My only problem is why did you have to stop right there.  Get to writing because I am going to hound you for more relentlessly until you come out with the next chapter.  I love the dynamic that you built between all the characters, it has me totally hooked.  I love you as a beta, but I love you more as an author!  That does not mean you get to leave little old me behind though.  :-)

 


knifethrower (Chapter 4) - Mon 23 Nov 2009

Good thing Kohaku was around to save Rin.  I'm really enjoying this story.  Sesshomaru Sama should have been thinking that he is in Kagome's debt, not Kagome in his debt...  That is only a minor observation.  Keep up the good work!  I hope you post again soon.... 


autumngold (Chapter 4) - Mon 23 Nov 2009

Thank goodness Rin has another protector around.  Especially since Inuyasha always acts before he thinks.  I just hope that Sesshoumaru doesn't feel too guilty about what happened.  It's not his fault that Inuyasha is an idiot.  I do hope that Inuyasha doesn't get to take Kagome.  She needs her rest, not to be bothered or harrassed by Inuyasha.  Please update soon!


Rowdys girl (Chapter 4) - Mon 23 Nov 2009

That was a wonderful chapter! I love the addition of Kohaku and his affection for Rin. That is so sweet!  I did find a few things for you to look at...

You better [had] not have done anything to Kagome or [I] so help me

would have been kept from impressionable young ears but it [didn’t] wasn't.

and he couldn’t stand the [site] sight of his ward’s even more

and the herbs should absorb whatever residual is left in her arm. (I think this should be either residual poison or residue)

She had finally gotten up and began picking the flowers that she had been sent out to get.

His thoughts were very [in-tuned] intune to the young girl underneath him, who had absolutely no idea that she was being watched or, rather, admired by the most unlikely of people.

The young taijiya was not even aware of her demise but kept [her] his[?] promise to keep moving (or kept his promise to her)

maybe then he would die with a clear [conscious] conscience

You will forever be in this Sesshoumaru’s debt  (Don't you mean: This Sesshoumaru will be forever in your debt. ?)

This is such a good story. I can't wait to see the next chapter!


knifethrower (Chapter 3) - Mon 23 Nov 2009

Now that was one exciting chapter.  Great writing!


Inumaru_Rapture (Chapter 4) - Mon 23 Nov 2009

Wow.  Talk about suspence and a cliffhanger!  I am really enjoying this story, and I hope you update again soon.


knifethrower (Chapter 2) - Mon 23 Nov 2009

I really like this.  I like the way you describe things, I can follow all the movements and picture what is taking place.  Your description of the late afternoon sunlight on a forest trail was really nice. 


Miko Anna (Chapter 1) - Wed 18 Nov 2009

*Bows* to the mighty angelicatt.  I knew that you had it in you and finally you let it out.  Soooooooo very happy that I can finally read what bumps about in that genius head of yours.  I actually had to go back and leave a review here too because evidently I was a dolt and forgot.  more More MORE!!!


Miko Anna (Chapter 3) - Wed 18 Nov 2009

I love it and therefor I demand more of it.  You can't just leave it there... no no no!  No fair, I guess now I know how it feels, but I don't want to.  I just want more of this story.  Okay I will make you a deal... I will send the next chapter over as soon as you tell me that you are done with your next chapter.  Fair enough? 


autumngold (Chapter 3) - Thu 12 Nov 2009

Thank goodness for Sesshoumaru!  He has certainly changed from the grumpy, mean taiyoukai that Kagome found injured earlier.  I just hope that he can save her now.  At least he killed the snake that attacked her.  Very good update!  Please post another chapter soon!


Rowdys girl (Chapter 3) - Thu 12 Nov 2009

I totally sympathize with you. It is much easier being a beta than an author. And now that I've read all 3 way-too-short chapters, I'm going to beg and plead with you to please give up your real life and just sit and write until the story is done. Please, pretty please, all with a pound of sugar? ;)  Actually, it's a very good story  and the chapters were just the right length - they ran from their start to their finish - I happen to have the patience of a two-year-old when it comes to waiting. I will try to be a good little reader and let your inspiration lead you to the finish of this very good tale.


Priestess Skye (Chapter 3) - Wed 11 Nov 2009

Oooooh these are fantastic. I am loving this story! Keep it up. I'm already recognizing the tale weaved into this and am enjoying the spin you're putting on it.

 


Miss Kagura (Chapter 1) - Wed 11 Nov 2009

I don't know what you were so afraid of, this is good! I love your style!


Priestess Skye (Chapter 1) - Wed 11 Nov 2009

Oh i love your sesshoumaru. his arrogance is delightful and totally in character. More!


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