Really well written. You have a good graps on the flow of rhythm, and the continued theme of pain strike through out. I found the bolded text to come across stronger than the rest, as if we are listening to a harsher voice. All in all, nicely done.

That was wonderfully somber.  Not in a bad way, either.  Definitely something that would make you come back down to Earth.  Some of the puncuation made it a little hard to get the flow right, but it was still really good.  I love poems, and that was beautiful.

It was a good attempt to show angst and hurt but your stanzas were repetitive and never did truly explain why she was in pain. I also don't understand why some of the text is bolded and others not, almost like a chorus to a song. A little explanation would go a long way to bettering this piece but you do exhibit talent for the genre. Keep it up

Not a bad poem. I was a little confused as to why two of the stanzas were in bolded, but other than that it was a very well written poem. She seemed to be going through a transition where she was putting all the blame on herself, to sharing it with someone else, very well done. Keep up the good work!

I don't know much about poetry, it's not a genre I get into.  At first it seems very simplistic, and somewhat redundant.  However the  repeated phrasing may have been intentional on your part to convey someone lost in their own suffering and without hope.  You did a good job at making the poem flow and rhyme.  You have talent... keep writing.

Very interesting poem. I think that you have some promise here. I would try to structure it a little differently - one of the stanzas was in bold font, which was a little confusing because I was unsure why this particular one was special, and I don't know what this was talking about exactly and how this was related to Sess/Kag...a little explanation would be good. Thanks!

A pretty decent poem, though there were a few errors here and there, overall it was nicely done.  Wish there was more to the story, to help explain what she was talking about, but even on its own, it's a nice read.