How promising for a first chapter! I absolutely loved the way you made her challenge him to a drinking contest...it was hilarious and yet, I could imagine it all in my mind. Great job there! I am looking forward to more chapters:)
Wow, what a great start - way to grab the reader. However, who is Sesshoumaru in this story? While we understand the InuYasha is the VP of the company, are we to assume that Sesshoumaru is the President?
I look foward to your next update...hopefully soon!
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