lol I liked it.....but it was kind of weird since the way that Lacey Mosley(Former Lead Singer)  interpretted this song was her giving herself over fully to GOD. But in a way I can see that by the lyrics one would think that she was referring to someone she loved. lol So yeah I liked it I lOVE flyleaf they are one of my favorite Christian Rock Bands so I enjoyed it. InuYasha no baka. lol

The story was smexy and smutty all on it's own...it didn't even need the song. Actually it would have flowed better for a reader if you had either just left the lyrics out or put them at the beginning or end. So much raw emotion between the 3 characters. While you didn't explain why Kagome broke up with InuYasha but the attack afterwards was a great indicator. How did she end up going to Sess? How long has Sess wanted to be with her? So many unanswered questions but I truly did adore this.

I thought this was written very well, smut for smut's sake. The only thing was, you didn't really say what the relationship was between Kagome and Inuyasha, for him to be so angry with her going to Sessy. If you did, perhaps I just missed it being mixed in with all the lovely lemony goodness? Anyways, as far as the song goes, I think the story could do well without it. I am never one that likes songfics much, so I say either put it at all at the end or leave it out altogether, but hey, it is your fic. Anyways, good job.

I normally do not like song fics.  To me the inserted lyrics just disrupt the flow of the story.  However, your story is one of the few exceptions. You successfully inserted the lyrics at just the right moment... and made it all work.  The lyrics actually enhanced the story.  Hats off to you.  You also wrote a very sensual lemon. Well done.

A pretty decent read, could use a bit of work, but on the whole you did a good job.  A few of your paragraphs are a bit too big which makes it harder to read on a computer screen, some of your sentences are too short and too many short sentences in a row tend to break up the flow of the story.  I love how the first time Sesshoumaru 'told' her he loved her it was unspoken and she understood it just from the look in his eyes, it was very sweet.  Keep up the good work :).

First off: I love Flyleaf and the song All Around Me.  You picked great moments to just slip the lyrics in – it felt completely natural while reading.  The lyrics were just spot on for every moment.  When I read the part where Inuyasha beats Kagome, the lyrics just fit so perfectly to that moment.  I’m Alive, I’m Alive, I’m Alive… That was great!

I really have nothing to criticize except for….!~i before e except after c~! ^__^ Seriously – I don’t like writing praise-only reviews, but that oneshot was DANM GOOD!  And the lemons were extra sour. ~.^

You’re a great writer – thank you for sharing this with us!

ducky out!

This was a totally awsome fic, and other than a few spelling and grammar issues, it was excetionally well written. One piece of advice however, would be to move the song lyrics to the end, or just omit them all together. the way they are now they inturrupt the flow of the story, and in all honesty your story could stand on its own without them there at all. it was a pleasure to read this fic full of lemony goodness, very steamy lemony goodness rather*fans self* a-hem, tee hee...anyhow Inuyasha was a real terror in this one, and im really glad Sesshoumaru made it in time to save Kagome... your story was enthralling, and i wish you all the best in your future endevors!!