Reviews for Stay by Waterunleashed

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Kai (Chapter 4) - Sun 10 Jan 2010

Very intresting story. I like how you've written the scenes and things like that. Its hard to find a story with good plot and good lemons as well. please update soon. I would like to read more and see where your going with this.

 

-kai


FairQueen (Chapter 4) - Sat 09 Jan 2010

write more write faster. great story  :)


Running in Circles (Chapter 4) - Sat 09 Jan 2010

Yeah!!! Another chapter!! Man I felt pretty bad for Kagome, but what can you expect from the Demon lord who has no clue what to do with himself. Sigh. Love the drama, and how its winds around pulling me in deeper. Great job, I'm glad you decided to turn this in to a chapter story.


natalie19 (Chapter 3) - Sat 09 Jan 2010

hello happy new year

continuous profavor


Silverwing (Chapter 3) - Sat 09 Jan 2010

I found this version to be much better than the last chapter and I am glad that you changed it. Kagome's behaviour seemed rather irrational and the interaction between the two seemed awkard. I am excited that you are continuing this story because Stay was one of my favourite pieces nominated last quarter. Thank you for writing and I look forward to your next update.


Kiri (Chapter 1) - Sat 09 Jan 2010

I enjoyed this very much - please keep the chapters going!!!!  It is nice to see a softer side to Lord Sesshoumaru  THANK YOU!


Itsumademo (Chapter 3) - Fri 08 Jan 2010

Great great chapter!! Though UGHS!! I wanted him to take her away! though i understand why he didn't. Sigh. ^-^

Your detail and word choice is good and getting better! However you still had a few small moments of generder confusion such as him/her he/she switches and a couple places where a smal general word was missing.

Can't wait for more! So very anxious to see what happens next!!! X3

P.S. i apologize that you will get on thinking that you had many new reviews and find that they are all from stupid, annoying me. Ehe, so sorry.


Itsumademo (Chapter 3) - Fri 08 Jan 2010

OH MY GOSH! THE NEXT CHAPTER! I FINISH MY LONG FREAKIN REVIEW AND IT'S HERE!!!

i....i think i love you...0,o

Okay that was creepy, shutting up to go read. THANK YOU! ^-^


Itsumademo (Chapter 2) - Fri 08 Jan 2010

I completely spaced to add something!!!! *smacks self*

I was so caught up in trying to portray my affection for the story i missed two important things!! GAH!! DX

One, being that you had several moments of pronoun confusion such as him/her though that got better in the second chapter. And a few spots where it seemed that words were missed in editing, which i know from experience can occur, but i tought i would mention it in order to help keep it in mind for later. Two, i can't help but swoon lovingly at the moments where Kagome holds her hand to Sesshy's face and he nuzzles into her touch. That is to sweet for words. It really, gave a good tug to love and well, let's face it, REALITY within all the adrenaline pumping erotic scenes. A clever idea, even if you hadn't intended my infered meaning.

Dying in need! *poisoned blood of awesome story i has X3*


Itsumademo (Chapter 2) - Fri 08 Jan 2010

I have simply fallen in love with your story! I happened across it when i came to the home page after a weeks absense from my dear laptop and internet and took a cursory glance at the recent updates in fanfiction on the site, incase anything caught my interest; yours did, though i assumed little would come of it, but when i began i was just...draw up into the world and characters! I adore the story, the way you set up the timing is great! I am so undeniably happy to have found the story, however brief the rush was, and am emphatically pleased that you are going to continue with it!!!

In a more, critque-esque, comment: You write with more finess to the mordern, simple style --that is more common lately in writing-- and i appreciated that, complex styles generally entice me more though, so ones that are parallel to social this written social conversation but still call to me are always pleasantly accepted.  You have a bit of repetition issues and a few word choices i wouldn't have used, but then again phrase work comes with practice and much editing.  However, that aside, your nice portrayal of an older, emotionally strong and controlled Kagome really interested me as did the well articulated idea of a lust enraged Sesshomaru. I think you could do a little better on your Sango, Miroku--i noticed a bit more pick up in his later on--, and Kikyo personalities...though i understand why Kikyo's more dominant existance as a priestess is not really helpful to the story's plot line. ^-^ All in all i was exceptionally pleased with your detail and description, the flow was stunning and the way the dialogue moved so effortlessly.

I am so very anxious to learn what happens next!! So much!! XD

On a more immature sidenote: your erotic scenes are so wonderfully done, they really pull at your mental and physical emotions and lures the reader into wanting more out of the story. No wonder so many people asked for it to be continued! I simply drooled internall picturing Sesshy! And, being a fan of InuKag also, i liked the moment of an crazed InuYasha as well, however slight it may have been ;D

Waiting in silent, excited agony for more! X3

 


sugar0o who lurks (Chapter 3) - Fri 08 Jan 2010

O_O i liked the way you originall re-wrote it, i like this too! though its angstier! i cant wait to see more, poor kagome she always gets hurt because of her loyalties.


sugar0o who lurks (Chapter 2) - Fri 08 Jan 2010

>:3 i likes this chapter t0o!


pauly (Chapter 3) - Fri 08 Jan 2010

Awwww, poor sessh, he´s so lonely and sad, I hope he gets happy very soon.   Awesome work  ;)


Sess Koibito (Chapter 3) - Fri 08 Jan 2010

Wow! I read the earlier version and then this one. That's a pretty big change. They're both great chapters but this one has definitely got more angst. Can't wait to read where you take it from here. :)


sugar0o who lurks (Chapter 2) - Fri 08 Jan 2010

that should go into my GM challenge!


sugar0o who lurks (Chapter 2) - Fri 08 Jan 2010

oh that was sexy. does Sesshomaru get to keep her forever, he should :3 maybesome how make her a taller demoness or something ^_^


Inusbabe (Chapter 1) - Thu 07 Jan 2010

Ok I loved it!! I do wonder what would how much of the that last time was the poison he did say he thought it would be another month. So what happens when all the poison is gone? Will he still say "stay"?


Kanela (Chapter 1) - Tue 17 Nov 2009

omg! it's awesome!!

your story was sooo refreshing, seeing Kagome in controol...and a submissive Sesshoumaru, god! that was soooo erotic!!

 


phishbon3s (Chapter 1) - Sun 01 Nov 2009

That was ..... wonderful. I struggle to find a word to discribe it, so I have to settle for wonderful.


XxUnknownXxXEntityxX (Chapter 1) - Sun 25 Oct 2009

WOW!! That was seriously hot! I think i need a cold shower lol   Thanks for writing and i am definitely looking forward to reading more of your work


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