Reviews for Fortune by katlady

Angelic Memories (Chapter 5) - Fri 26 Jun 2009
Hey there. I like this story idea, but I feel it needs a bit of work. The plot is fine and the idea is different. But at times it is a little hard to read due to mistakes littering the chapters. I hope this doesn't get you down though because it is a fantastic idea with the way you are using the seven deadly sins. I liked the names you choose as well. Actually there are quite a few good things in each of the chapters. Perhaps you should look into a beta to read over it and fix things up and it will most likely help the story appear and sound better with a more natural flow.

Anonymous (Chapter 1) - Thu 11 Jun 2009

u've got many mistakes: run-on sentences, mispelling, etc. making some of ur sentences even hard 2 understand.


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