A bit hard to understand here & there, I think you may have word choice errors or too many words. In the last paragraph the tree is the Goshinboku, Goshiniki (actually Goshinki) was the Naraku spawn who bit Tessaiga in half & was made into Sesshoumaru's sword Tokijin.
Kagome: Ew, gross, I'm destined to fall in love with lord icey pants?
Sesshomaru: I wouldn't touch that filthy human with a ten-foot pole!
We'll just see how long that lasts. My guess is, not long at all...
Nice! I especially liked the part where Rin's eyes looked dead. At first, I thought I read it wrong, and you were writing about Kagome, since she was betrayed by InuYasha. But Rin came back from the dead damaged, and Kagome healed her! That was a great inspiration. Excellent!
Ameire (Chapter 3) - Mon 09 Nov 2009
Cute~ :3
But I'm confused. She planned to throw herself off a cliff-face with the jewwel to kill herself....to protect the jewel that could have been retrieved by Inuyasha after she's fallen to her death?
Oh, well, minor ondescrepency's, I'll be waiting on the next chapter~
I liked it. This is very, very good, and I can't wait to read more.
Diane (Chapter 2) - Tue 14 Apr 2009
I liked it but you do have some oddities, etc. usually Sango's cat's name is spelled as either Kilala or Kirara. The Saimyosho (seen multiple spellings so no biggy how you spell it) are hell wasps as far as I remember & it's not Owasari but osuwari & translates as something like honorable sit & is an actual Japanese dog command. Hope this is helpful.
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