I have no problem with the story. It flows rather well and the imagery and situation are clear. My only problem with the story( sorry if being a ninny since Sesshomaru and Kagome are married in the story) is that its not just them. This being a Sesshomaru/Kagome pairing site. I know there are probably more stories on here involving more than the said pairing etc. Again I have no problem with the story , your writing is good. Its just when I come here I want to read just about them and no one else. Sorry for being a ninny just needed to get that off my chest.
The content was good. I actually enjoyed it. However, you need to work on your grammar. There are a ton of instances where the wrong word or misspelled word stopped the flow of the story and made me have to second guess what I thought you were meaning to say.
Again, I liked the story, and I look forward to reading more of your work. I am just suggesting that if you work on your grammar, or get a beta to help you with it, it would be much more enjoyable to the reader.
Crimson Rose (Chapter 1) - Sat 10 Jan 2009
Different, but good. Let me tell you something, I REALLY ENJOYED IT! ;) I've never read anything like this before, so you have oringnality which is really good. Well can't wait to read your next story! ^_^
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