OH MY GOODNESS!!! This was sooo kawaii!! baby writer you may be, this was vary well done. I am subscribing for more updates!!

You keep right on writing!!!!!!!You're gonna be awesome! Great job!

Very well written.  Both characters stay in character, and you portray the moment well.

Hellooo! This was an amazing one shot.  I would love to see more of this, but it's a one shot for a reason. You did great! I loved it.

Excelente inicio!!!

No dejes de escribir!!

???? A mi me gustó mucho!

Gracias por la historia!   

You did a wonderful job writing this.  Keep it up and you will keep getting better and better.  I look forward to seeing more of your stories.

Your writing is completely and utterly beautiful. There is poetry in your prose. I look forward to more of your work. 

This was really cute! Very good for a new writer. =)

You may be a baby writer, but you did well with this.  It was short and sweet, and is sure to give many people, myself included, the inspiration to write something similar.  It's definitely going into my favorites, and I can't wait to see what else you come up with to add to the collection of stories of our favorite couple.

Good luck with your writing.