Beautiful story, but what happened to Shippo?

Hey!

You have a wonderful sense of imagination and good story-telling skills. The only problem I have is that the story needs an editor/ proofreader.

There are a lot of incomplete sentences as well as glaring grammatical errors that detract from the reader's enjoyment. I think that if you did another read-through on your own, you'll find a few mistakes.

All in all it was a good story.

Keep up the good work!

I just discovered your story and I enjoyed reading i5 because it's different from all the other stories that I have read.

Awesome story, I loved it!

I apologise but it seems I did not like this story. This is my first time saying this. I typically give reviews on what could be improved but the ending was disappointing. The typos, grammar and such need alot of work. It made things so confusing. I kept reading in hopes of a good smut but it didn't go well. I feel like this has soooooo much potential! It just needs a little help. It's hard writing alone I know. Just keep at it.

The mistakes ate making this a little difficult to read. You said list instead of lust twice. And there was something about women dawned to him? Im not sure. I like the story I just wish it was clearer.

Some of the typos to the end make it a little hard to understand what's going on. I'm really not sure what Sessh did at the end

Thank you for the time you spending to end this story. I know writing is not that easy....

See you for the next story.....

Loved it ;)

Por favor hace mucho tiempo que no actualizas me encanta esta historia

Sorry you lost motivation for the stor, but I really enjoy reading what you wrote so far.   Thank you for you time in completing storytellin.  Can’t wait for the next one.

bwhahahaha yes kagome, show them your strength! cant wait to ee what happens next!

This fic is fantastic! I could keep reading and reading and still,  not get enough of this fic. Fantastic job ;)

I could really tell that you didn't feel like writing this. Rather than rushing to update/finish, you probably should take a breath, not update for a while, and come back to it fresh. The fight went so fast that my eyes skipped over half of it, and I didn't want to read it all. In fact, it made me not want to read the rest of the story if and when you ever get to it.

Holy guacamole this is a fan fic I can see myself rereading over and over. Please update soon 

Oh no... How unrealistic is my hope that every main character survived or even more crazily, that all the allies survive?

The shallow bite!

really enjoy this story  hope you can find your muse again and write more chapters

The battle scene is great!!!  I love a pissed off Kagome. Can't wait for the next update

That's was a great chapter!! Dont beat yourself up!