This was a very interesting chapter. You did nicely for just writing the chapter in such short amount time and then post it too.
Both Kagome and Sessho are acting rather wierdly and just so OOC. If they are mates, would they not feel each others feelings like when Kagome felt Sessho's over whelming sadness and vice versa, they should be feeling each other's feelings when they are close to each other and the babies would be acting excited when they are near their father. The way Kagome broke it off with Sesshomaru was a bit unneccessarily cruel doing it through a text telling him there was no passion between them. They both should have been going through some form of mating pangs because they are not around each other enough, especially if she is changing.
The other thing is, unless I missed it, why was Sessho not wearing his markings and where was his beast. Sessho just gives up too easily and basically let certain people push him around like Kagome making rules and demands of him and him wimping out.
Well anyway, I'm sure you will have all the answers in your next chapter, I hope...this Sesshomaru is frustrating me out. lol
I love the story and keep doing the wonderful writing that you are doing. I am looking forward to the next chapter.
(Chapter 5) - Fri 27 Jan 2017
really enjoyed this chapter can't wait for the next one
(Chapter 1) - Fri 27 Jan 2017
It's a good story it needs a bit of formatting. For instance when the characters speak you should start a new sentence.
"I am going to name one of the twins Abigail." Kagome said
Sesshomaru tensed and replied, "I don't know if I like that name since it was a character in your last erotic novel."
"It was the book that helped you get into your current state." He answered. I think you get the idea.
Also try to get into the mind of the character because some of their responses are too obvious. Sessh is a fighter and a dog characteristic is stubbornness. He's a bit flat.
(Chapter 5) - Fri 27 Jan 2017
I like it and thx for updating but please! Please use you're instead of 'your' for every form you are yours or other. Please! I like it and sorry to be a bother but it makes me cringe and ruins the flow of reading! Please don't be mad at me. I understand it may be easier but it's bugging me! Thx in advance! Take care!
This story is very interesting, keep it coming. Happy New Year!
(Chapter 3) - Sat 14 Jan 2017
interesting story! i will add it to my favorites and keep following the progress.
(Chapter 1) - Fri 13 Jan 2017
Can't wait to see what happens when they meet. Great story so far! Hope you will update soon.
Very nice chapter, well written and humerous too.
Some men are so dense and it seems Touga and Sessho fall in that catagory somewhat. They should have started at the bottom first; it probably could have saved them some time searrching. I usually start at the bottom first myself because it always seems to work for me most of the time....that's how my luck runs....lol. I was surprised that InuKimi did not sense that Kagome's babies were demonic when she touched her stomach or maybe felt a familiar aura coming from her. Well, at least they finally found the right person. Now that she is four and half months, hopefully Sessho gets to find and aquaints himself with her before the babies are born at least.
I hope you are feeling much better than before and maybe get some much needed sleep as time goes by. I just got home from having an Endoscopy procedure a half an hour ago and the first thing I did was get on my computer to check for your story and was excited when it was posted...yaaah!
Looking forward to the next chapter. Excellent job!
(Chapter 2) - Mon 09 Jan 2017
This story is coming together nicely. Sessho seems to be finally getting it together. I loved the part with the conversation he has with his parents, especially when his mother refers to his penis as mini Sesshomaru. It cracked me up.
I have another comment but I will PM that to you later. Looking forward to more chapters. Great job!
When I read the summary, I was already hooked. Can't wait for the next chapter and how far this story will go and the development of the characters. Keep up the good work.
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