princess of the western lands (Chapter 2) - Mon 02 Jan 2017

Great second chapter but there were a couple of spelling errors. How is that southern lord still alive? He was only a minor lord and what was it he wanted to know? Did kagome's father steal her back instead of negotiating? Is that why he's paying some sort of tribute? With inu no taisho and his sons with their armies, will they go to war?

There's plenty of detail and depth in the story already and without giving everything away. I'm impressed and looking forward to the next chapter.

Update soon onegai

 

Ja ne


HolyButterBall (Chapter 1) - Mon 02 Jan 2017

Love the story so far. I have one concern though. I don't know if its just me or what, but for some reason I am seeing the top portion rewritten again in a bigger font on the bottom.


princess of the western lands (Chapter 1) - Mon 02 Jan 2017

I like the first chapter. You paid great attention to detail and gave some backround information as well. You've also managed to give your story a unique feel with only alluding to kagome's past. 

 

What could have happend to give her those scars and helping her & sesshomaru to become so close? What is this item that was stolen from the southern lord? Was the item kagome, because the southern lord wanted her and was refused?

 

Update soon onegai

 

Ja ne


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